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Usually, students have to study a range of different subjects. Some people believe that learning subjects without being interested in them won’t be beneficial. v.1

Usually, students have to study a range of different subjects. Some people believe that learning subjects without being interested in them won’t be beneficial. v. 1
It is true that students these days have to study many subjects compared to the past. At times it seems that there is no need to study subjects in which a child is not interested in but this lead to long term effects on the career of a student. To begin with, for the all-round development of a child basic knowledge of every subject is quite essential because being aware of only a few interested subjects will create certain problems in future. For instance, if we consider a student, who is allowed to learn only his/her interested subject then he/she cannot cope in other fields due to lack of information. To develop a perfect society, people with complete understanding are required then only they can handle the issue in adverse situations. Moreover, each and every subject has its own importance, we cannot deny this fact. Learning all the subjects from school days onwards will provide a student with more career opportunities. As we know the taste of a person changes as he/she grows up. Therefore if he/she is given a chance to select the interested subjects then sometimes it happens that he/ she can lose that interest after a certain age. This would lead to distress for a student. However, learning a few specific subjects have some benefits too. First, a student can develop a complete in-depth knowledge on certain subjects which helps them to work effectively in future when they start to do a job. In addition to this dealing with only a few subjects make a student stress free and keep him/her away from the burden of academic vast syllabus thus he/she can concentrate well in studies. Owing to the above reasons it may be beneficial for a student in few cases to learn specific subjects but I believe in this fast and competitive era knowledge of every subject is very important.
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students
these days
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have to
study
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many
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subjects
compared to the past. At
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times it
seems that there is no need to study
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subjects
in which a child is not
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interested
in
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but
this lead to long term effects on the career of a student.

To
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begin
with, for the all-round development of a child basic knowledge of every
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subject
is quite essential
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because
being aware of
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only
a few
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interested
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subjects
will create certain problems
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in future
.
For instance
, if we consider a
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student
, who is
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allowed
to learn
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only
his/her
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interested
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subject
then
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he/she
cannot cope in other fields due to lack of information. To develop a perfect society,
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people
with complete understanding
are required
then
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only
they can handle the issue in adverse situations.

Moreover
, each and every
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subject
has its
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own
importance, we cannot deny this fact. Learning all the
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subjects
from school days onwards will provide a
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student
with more career opportunities. As we know the taste of a person
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changes
as
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he/she
grows up.
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Therefore
if
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he/she
is
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given
a chance to select the
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interested
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subjects
then
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sometimes
it happens that he/ she can lose that interest after a certain age. This would lead to distress for a student.

However
, learning a few specific
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subjects
have
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some
benefits too.
First
, a
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student
can develop
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a complete in-depth knowledge
on certain
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subjects
which
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helps
them to work
effectively
in future when they
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start
to do a job.
In addition
to this dealing with
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only
a few
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subjects
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make
a
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student
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stress
free and
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keep
him/her away from the burden of academic vast syllabus
thus
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he/she
can concentrate well in studies.

Owing to the above reasons it may be beneficial for a
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student
in few cases to learn specific
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subjects
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but
I believe in this
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fast
and competitive era knowledge of every
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subject
is
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very
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important
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Usually, students have to study a range of different subjects. Some people believe that learning subjects without being interested in them won’t be beneficial. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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