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Using the main points and examples from the reading, explain the differences between myths and legends. Then refer to the lecture to explain why Paul Bunyan would be considered a legend. v.1

Using the main points and examples from the reading, explain the differences between myths and legends. Then refer to the lecture to explain why Paul Bunyan would be considered a legend. v. 1
Some museums have an admission charge while some do not. In my opinion, the drawbacks of an entrance fee are eclipsed by its benefits in the sense that the income will be ploughed back into operation and development of the museums. A major disadvantage of an entrance fee is the possibility of reducing the number of visitors. Museums house exhibitions and artefacts of great educational and historical value. If the chief aim of a museum is to introduce the local community, entry should be free to the public and visitors. Take some folk museums in Hong Kong, which preserve historic relics and display folk customs, for example. Admission to these folk museums, which are often monuments, is free of charge. If they had charged an entry fee, many might have turned to other activities. Granted, this fee might have a negative effect on the figures, but an income is favourable to museums in terms of operation. Museums feature educational exhibitions at times, and this could not have been done without a sum of money expended on hiring professionals and buying equipment. The Hong Kong Space Museum, for instance, has monthly exhibitions on different issues and professional docents are employed to take visitors on a guided tour around the museum. This example speaks volumes about how a reasonable entry charge is advantageous to the operation of a museum. In conclusion, the disadvantages of an admission fee are overshadowed by the benefits accruing from a stable source of income. Therefore, having weighed up the pros and cons, I am convinced that museums should charge an entrance fee for the sake of operation and development.
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Some
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have an admission
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charge
while
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some
do not. In my opinion, the drawbacks of an entrance
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fee
are eclipsed
by its benefits in the sense that the income will be
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ploughed
back into
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operation
and development of the museums.

A major disadvantage of an entrance
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fee
is the possibility of reducing the number of visitors.
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Museums
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house
exhibitions and
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artefacts
of great educational and historical value. If the chief aim of a
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museum
is to introduce the local community, entry should be free to the public and visitors. Take
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some
folk
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museums
in Hong Kong, which preserve historic relics and display folk customs,
for example
. Admission to these folk
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museums
, which are
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often
monuments, is free of
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charge
. If they had charged an entry
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fee
,
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many might
have turned to other activities.

Granted, this
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fee
might have a
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negative
effect on the figures,
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but
an income is
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favourable
to
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museums
in terms of
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operation
.
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Museums
feature educational exhibitions at times, and this could not have
been done
without a sum of money expended on hiring professionals and buying equipment. The Hong Kong Space
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Museum
,
for instance
, has monthly exhibitions on
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different
issues and professional docents
are employed
to take visitors on a guided tour around the
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museum
. This example speaks volumes about how a reasonable entry
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charge
is advantageous to the
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operation
of a museum.

In conclusion
, the disadvantages of an admission
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fee
are overshadowed
by the benefits accruing from a stable source of income.
Therefore
, having weighed up the pros and cons, I
am convinced
that
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museums
should
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charge
an entrance
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fee
for the sake of
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operation
and development.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Using the main points and examples from the reading, explain the differences between myths and legends. Then refer to the lecture to explain why Paul Bunyan would be considered a legend. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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