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Now using the points and examples from the reading, explain the differences between myths and legends. Then refer to the lecture to explain why Paul Bunyan would be considered a legend. v.1

Now using the points and examples from the reading, explain the differences between myths and legends. Then refer to the lecture to explain why Paul Bunyan would be considered a legend. v. 1
These days, the colossal upsurge of internet shopping is quite alarming. Some people believe that it would result in the downfall of towns and city shops. Personally, I disagree that shops on the streets will ever dissolute due to product assurance and security they guarantee. Firstly, the need to be sure and reassured of a product quality is a pertinent point to consider. A significant number of buyers always seek assuring prospects from their sellers. Typical examples include, but are not limited to, product test and re-test, unpacking and repacking. These are done before sealing a purchase agreement in order to avoid post purchase dissonance. Additionally, purchasers require clear and detailed information about their suppliers. This includes the address and directions to their shops so that they can easily return a purchased item in case of default. Another point to consider is the maximum safety a customer feels about their financial decisions. Although, online shopping could be secure in terms of its cashless policy; however, the greatest financial challenges it might pose scare many buyers away. There have been occasions of defraud whereby consumers pay for their goods and never get to receive them. Also, network problems when payments are made via the internet which might aggravate to more hassles for a customer. Purchasing a commodity in a shop would eliminate such troubles since personal contact is inevitable and as such, better payment options are utilized. Conclusively, online purchase is truly dominating these days, which has made majority of individuals agree that it would destroy the existence of erected shops. However, I disagree because towns and city stores are more reliable in terms of financial safety and positive assurances it gives to consumers about their purchased products.
These days, the colossal upsurge of internet shopping is quite alarming.
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people
believe that it would result in the downfall of towns and city
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shops
.
Personally
, I disagree that
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shops
on the streets will ever dissolute due to
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product
assurance and security they guarantee.

Firstly
, the need to be sure and reassured of a
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product
quality is a pertinent point to consider. A significant number of buyers always seek assuring prospects from their sellers. Typical examples include,
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but
are not limited to,
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product
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test
and re-
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test
, unpacking and repacking. These
are done
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before
sealing a
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purchase
agreement in order to avoid post
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purchase
dissonance.
Additionally
, purchasers require
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clear
and detailed information about their suppliers. This includes the address and directions to their
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shops
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so
that they can
easily
return a
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purchased
item in case of default.

Another point to consider is the maximum safety a customer feels about their financial decisions. Although, online shopping could be secure in terms of its cashless policy;
however
, the greatest financial challenges it might pose scare
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many
buyers away. There have been occasions of defraud whereby consumers pay for their
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goods
and never
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get
to receive them.
Also
, network problems when payments
are made
via the internet which might aggravate to more hassles for a customer. Purchasing a commodity in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
would eliminate such troubles since personal contact is inevitable and as such, better payment options
are utilized
.

Conclusively
, online
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purchase
is
truly
dominating these days, which has made
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majority of
individuals
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agree
that it would
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destroy
the existence of erected
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shops
.
However
, I disagree
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because
towns and city stores are more reliable in terms of financial safety and
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positive
assurances it gives to consumers about their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Language is to the mind more than light is to the eye.
William Gibson

IELTS essay Now using the points and examples from the reading, explain the differences between myths and legends. Then refer to the lecture to explain why Paul Bunyan would be considered a legend. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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