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Using points and examples from the talk, explain how learning art can impact a child 's development. v.1

Using points and examples from the talk, explain how learning art can impact a child 's development. v. 1
In the last decade, it has been observed that many students opt to learn through an online course. Even though there are many advantages to it such as studying as per own convenient and cost-effective, the disadvantages are lack of classroom feeling and face to face interaction with teachers. One of the positive sides of studying online is convenience. This is because many students could complete their short-term course as per their own convenient time and place, which saves their time to go to the classroom. For example, in Mumbai, 55% of students choose such techniques to finish their desired course due to their time with the help of the internet instead of going to the university to attend. Cost-effectiveness is another positive aspect. Many universities charge exorbitant tuition fees for the degree or courses which do not benefit many students, and they prefer online studies as it is cheap and cost-saving. There are many negative sides to such studies, but one of the negative is missing the classroom atmosphere. As students who choose such learning would finish it from their home place or any other place with the help of the internet, resulting in missing the environment of the classroom where the teacher used to teach with chalk and blackboard. Another downside to this learning is no interaction with teachers and colleagues. Online learning indeed is the recorded one and there is no teacher in front of us to teach us. For instance, a survey conducted by the newspaper the Times of India stated that in India some students often quit the online course because there feel bore due to listening recorded version and no teacher for an explanation with chalk and board. In conclusion, although learning through online brings the benefits such as finishing the course as per our timing and pace, it also brings the drawbacks like leaving the course in the middle due to lack of interaction among teachers and friends.
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opt to learn through an
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online
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course
.
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there are
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many
advantages to it such as studying as per
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convenient and cost-effective, the disadvantages are lack of classroom feeling and face to face interaction with teachers.

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positive
sides of studying
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online
is convenience. This is
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because
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many
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students
could complete their short-term
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course
as per their
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own
convenient
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time
and place, which saves their
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time
to go to the classroom.
For example
, in Mumbai, 55% of
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students
choose such techniques to finish their desired
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course
due to their
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time
with the
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help
of the internet
instead
of going to the university to attend. Cost-effectiveness is another
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positive
aspect.
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universities charge exorbitant tuition fees for the degree or
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courses
which do not benefit
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students
, and they prefer
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studies as it is
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cheap
and cost-saving.

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sides to such studies,
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one of the
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is missing the classroom atmosphere. As
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students
who choose such
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learning
would finish it from their home place or any other place with the
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help
of the internet, resulting in missing the environment of the classroom where the
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used
to teach with chalk and blackboard. Another downside to this
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learning
is no interaction with
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teachers
and colleagues.
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Online
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learning
indeed
is the recorded one and there is no
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teacher
in front of us to teach us.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the newspaper the
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Times
of India stated that in India
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some
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students
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quit the
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online
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course
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because
there feel bore due to listening recorded version and no
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teacher
for an explanation with chalk and board.

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, although
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learning
through
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brings the benefits such as finishing the
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course
as per our timing and pace, it
also
brings the drawbacks like leaving the
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course
in the middle due to lack of interaction among
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teachers
and friends.
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IELTS essay Using points and examples from the talk, explain how learning art can impact a child 's development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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