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Using points and examples from the lecture, summarize the two explanations of how planes are able to fly. v.1

Using points and examples from the lecture, summarize the two explanations of how planes are able to fly. v. 1
Some people hold the view that food production should be proportional to the population demand, and countries should minimize their import practices. From my perspective, I agree with this opinion due to its positive influences on the environment and the local economy. On the one hand, I agree that importing less food can bring about some certain drawbacks. Firstly, this practice can narrow the choices of diet for consumers as many types of plants cannot be grown and thrive in the country’s weather conditions and need to be imported from other nations. Secondly, limiting imports could come at the economic costs for many countries where export is their main source of profits. For example, exporting rice has created huge revenues for Vietnam, and significantly contribute high taxes to the government, raising the national fund for improving citizens’ health care and education. Therefore, If less rice were exported, there would be an insufficient budget allocated to solving these issues. On the one hand, I agree that limiting imported food and supporting locally produced products are beneficial to the environment. It is irrefutable this practice can help reduce the amount of CO2 released into the atmosphere owing to the reduction in transporting produce transnationally by plane or ferry. In addition, producing the adequate amount of food for the population’s size could reduce food waste, which is then decomposed and emit methane and CO2 into the atmosphere, aggravating the global warming. Last but not least, consuming domestically produced produce and reduced import would lessen the competition between local farmers and other foreign suppliers, boosting sale of own-brand food and thus increasing the income of local producers. In conclusion, despite the downsides of restricting imports and focus on local products, I support these practices owing to the great benefits they offer.
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people
hold the view that
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food
production should be proportional to the population demand, and countries should minimize their
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import
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practices
. From my perspective, I
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agree
with this opinion due to its
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positive
influences on the environment and the
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local
economy.

On the one hand, I
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agree
that importing less
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food
can bring about
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some
certain drawbacks.
Firstly
, this
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practice
can narrow the choices of diet for consumers as
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many
types of plants cannot
be grown
and thrive in the country’s weather conditions and need to
be imported
from other nations.
Secondly
, limiting
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imports
could
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come
at the economic costs for
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many
countries where export is their main source of profits.
For example
, exporting rice has created huge revenues for Vietnam, and
significantly
contribute high taxes to the
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government
, raising the national fund for improving citizens’ health care and education.
Therefore
, If less rice
were exported
, there would be an insufficient budget allocated to solving these issues.

On the one hand, I
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agree
that limiting imported
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food
and supporting
locally
produced products are beneficial to the environment. It is irrefutable this
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practice
can
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help
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reduce
the amount of CO2 released into the atmosphere owing to the reduction in transporting produce
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transnationally
by
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plane
or ferry.
In addition
, producing the adequate amount of
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food
for the population’s size could
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reduce
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food
waste, which is then decomposed and emit methane and CO2 into the atmosphere, aggravating the global warming. Last
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but
not least, consuming
domestically
produced produce and
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reduced
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import
would lessen the competition between
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local
farmers and other foreign suppliers, boosting sale of
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own
-brand
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food
and
thus
increasing the income of
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local
producers.

In conclusion
, despite the downsides of restricting
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imports
and focus on
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local
products, I support these
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practices
owing to the great benefits they offer.
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IELTS essay Using points and examples from the lecture, summarize the two explanations of how planes are able to fly. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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