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Using points and examples from the lecture, explain how maritime nations affected the spice trade in Europe. v.1

Using points and examples from the lecture, explain how maritime nations affected the spice trade in Europe. v. 1
These days, in many families there are multiple vehicles for every individual. Most of the people nowadays prefer traveling to offices, colleges or for some personal work by their personal car or other automobiles. This can cause traffic issues through which consequences such as delay to work or important places can take place. The reason being, it is debatable around the world that the taxation on personal use cars should be high, through which the government can make better quality of public transportation services. In this essay, I am going to discuss some of the pros and cons of this regime, and exemplify it to some extent. To start with, let us look at some advantages of such a solution. Firstly, through such implementation, the volume of traffic will go down. To illustrate, if high taxes will be charged by the government, many people will automatically stop using personal cars. This will reduce the congestion on the roads and provide smooth traffic all around. Another major positive from this will be that, the public transport quality will be enhanced and different services can be launched such as upgraded buses and metros can be introduced for better connectivity in cities. On the other hand, there are some cons to such taxations as well. Many people will get demotivate to buy own vehicles. To explain this, by seeing the high tax rates, individuals will stop investing in purchasing personal cars and spend on other alternatives. Furthermore, this will also affect the government tax collections. Another negative consequence of this policy can be that, it can put a burden on public transportation. As more and more people will switch to the option of public vehicles, the pressure to provide frequent services and better connectivities will immerge and this will backfire the government itself. To conclude, the idea of taxing personal cars is good. However, we have to find a balanced approach to the usage of such vehicles and public transports. So that, there can be less traffic hauls in the town.
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personal
work by their
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car
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issues through which consequences such as delay to work or
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important
places can take place. The reason being, it is debatable around the world that the taxation on
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personal
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use
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cars
should be high, through which the
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government
can
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make
better quality of
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public
transportation services. In this essay, I am going to discuss
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some of the
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advantages of such a solution.
Firstly
, through such implementation, the volume of
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traffic
will go down. To illustrate, if high taxes will
be charged
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,
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. This will
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the congestion on the roads and provide smooth
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all around. Another major
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positive
from this will be that, the
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public
transport quality will
be enhanced
and
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different
services can
be launched
such as upgraded buses and metros can
be introduced
for better connectivity in cities.

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cons to such
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this, by seeing the high tax rates, individuals will
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and spend on other alternatives.
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, this will
also
affect the
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government
tax collections. Another
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consequence of this policy can be that, it can put a burden on
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transportation. As more and more
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people
will switch to the option of
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vehicles
, the pressure to provide frequent services and better
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connectivities
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To conclude
, the
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is
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However
, we
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have to
find a balanced approach to the usage of such
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and
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transports.
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that, there can be less
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hauls in the town.
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IELTS essay Using points and examples from the lecture, explain how maritime nations affected the spice trade in Europe. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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