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Use the main points and examples from the lecture to describe two types of influences majority and minority. v.1

Use the main points and examples from the lecture to describe two types of influences majority and minority. v. 1
The number of serious accidents is growing because more and more people are driving cars on city streets. Some think the solution lies in lowering speed limits, but others think that improving public transportation will have a more powerful effect as it will take cars off the road completely. I believe both solutions are valid. This essay will consider the different viewpoints before deciding what is the best solution. There are some that see speeding as the main reason why people are involved in motor vehicle accidents and think that driving slower can solve the problem. Indeed, if people drove slower throughout the city, the risk and frequency of accidents would decrease because the faster a car, travel, the more damage it can do to whatever it hits. For instance, many cities around the world, like Paris, France, have significantly lowered their speed limits over the last decade and it seems that fewer serious incidents have been reported. However, some think that the streets would be safer with fewer cars on the road and so the solution lies in improving public transportation. Faster and more efficient subway and bus systems along with reliable high-speed train service in and out of a city will make it easier for commuters to choose an alternative to driving. Cities, like Seoul, Korea, that have focused on building public transport that is reliable, fast and safe are examples of how this approach can reduce the number of traffic accidents while keeping people moving. My opinion is a balance of the two. Cities that have been developed with great public transport systems have fewer car problems on the road and if they also have lower speed limits, they are an ideal place to visit or work in. Brussels, Belgium is an example of this as it has fast and reliable tram, bus and metro systems and it also ensures that drivers maintain slower speeds by installing speed bumps, traffic circles and frequent speed monitoring devices so there are far fewer reports of serious accidents. In conclusion, city streets need to be safer for everyone and speeding is definitely a problem, but with improved public transit, there will be fewer cars to worry about. If cities make drivers slow down and also maintain an efficient rail and bus system, the issue of safe roads will be reduced, and we can all feel safe
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accidents
is growing
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because
more and more
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people
are driving
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cars
on city streets.
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Some
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think
the solution lies in lowering
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speed
limits,
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but
others
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think
that improving
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public
transportation will have a more powerful effect as it will take
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cars
off the
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road
completely. I believe both solutions are valid. This essay will consider the
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different
viewpoints
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before
deciding what is the best solution.

There are
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some
that
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see
speeding as the main reason why
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people
are involved
in motor vehicle
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accidents
and
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think
that driving slower can solve the problem.
Indeed
, if
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people
drove slower throughout the city, the
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risk
and frequency of
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accidents
would decrease
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because
the faster a
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car
, travel, the more damage it can do to whatever it hits.
For instance
,
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many
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cities
around the world, like Paris, France, have
significantly
lowered their
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speed
limits over the last decade and it seems that fewer serious incidents have
been reported
.

However
,
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some
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think
that the streets would be safer with fewer
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cars
on the
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road
and
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so
the solution lies in improving
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public
transportation. Faster and more efficient subway and bus
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systems
along with reliable high-speed train service in and out of a city will
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make
it easier for commuters to choose an alternative to driving.
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Cities
, like Seoul, Korea, that have focused on building
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public
transport
that is
reliable,
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fast
and safe are examples of how this approach can
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reduce
the number of traffic
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accidents
while keeping
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people
moving.

My opinion is a balance of the two.
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Cities
that have
been developed
with great
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public
transport
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systems
have fewer
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car
problems on the
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road
and if they
also
have lower
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speed
limits, they are an ideal place to visit or work in. Brussels, Belgium is an example of this as it has
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fast
and reliable tram, bus and metro
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systems
and it
also
ensures that drivers maintain slower
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speeds
by installing
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speed
bumps, traffic circles and frequent
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speed
monitoring devices
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so
there are far fewer reports of serious accidents.

In conclusion
, city streets need to be safer for everyone and speeding is definitely a problem,
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but
with
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improved
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public
transit, there will be fewer
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cars
to worry about. If
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cities
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make
drivers slow down and
also
maintain an efficient rail and bus
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system
, the issue of safe
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roads
will be
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reduced
, and we can all feel
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safe
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Use the main points and examples from the lecture to describe two types of influences majority and minority. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
395 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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