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Do you prefer traveling alone or traveling with a companion? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v.1

Do you prefer traveling alone or traveling with a companion? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
In today’s world, significant challenges are increasing in our daily life, which is related to not only the environment but also related to population and schooling. We need to really understand, how these problems are rapidly rising in next decade and, how we need to prevent. I will shed some lights on my essay related to challenges, the root cause of these problems and will also share some details on how to prevent these problems. To begin with the problems in our next decade, although there will be the biggest issue related to our environment, there will also be challenges related to our population and schooling as well. Firstly, the quality of air is decreasing gradually due to air pollution. All the construction is taking place by destroying a significant amount of forest. As a result of this, increasing the load of carbon dioxide while decreasing the supply of oxygen. Secondly, our population is facing problems related to community. As a result of this, not only we are seeing a huge amount of traffic increase, but also an increasing trend of demand more to supply less. For an example, increasing lot of housing accommodation. In addition to this, it also impacts on the quality of schooling. The rate of students is getting enrolled more, which results the ratio of students are more per each class. To begin with the solution to the above challenges, we need to solve this by taking preventive actions. Firstly, there should be clearly measured policies outlined by the authority. I would firstly possibly begin to resolve population problem. Because, all challenges related to pollution and schooling are due to increased population. We need to think of how we can reduce the birth rate. For an instance, In India, there is a promotion of policies with a quote saying “We Two Our Two”. The government should only provide compensation to the parents who has only one child. Secondly, the ministry should take precaution steps on providing better infrastructure by providing better transport facilities. As a result of this, this will reduce a significant traffic increase. In addition to this, authority should promote more to protect the forest and jungles to reduce construction by declaring those lands as a green land. In addition to this, although the state has responsibilities to resolve these challenges, every citizen should also take equal responsibilities. For an instance, we should be inspired to plant more trees in our surroundings. In addition to this, we should really think about family planning to ensure we have only one or two children at most, which would eventually help in providing better schooling for them and reducing population as well. To recapitulate, although there are various challenges related to our environment, population and schooling, there are also various solutions to these challenges. If every government and citizen take equally preventive steps, we can really be able to protect our surrounding, provide better schooling and reduce population as well.
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the environment
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schooling
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need
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decade and, how we
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some
lights on my essay
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related
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challenges
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problems
and will
also
share
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some
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details
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prevent
these problems.

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with the
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problems
in our
next
decade, although there will be the biggest issue
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related
to our environment, there will
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challenges
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population
and
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schooling
as well
.
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, the quality of air is decreasing
gradually
due to air pollution. All the construction is taking place by destroying a significant amount of forest. As a
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result
of this,
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increasing
the load of carbon dioxide while decreasing the supply of oxygen.
Secondly
, our
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population
is facing
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problems
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related
to community. As a
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result
of this, not
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only
we are seeing a huge amount of traffic increase,
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but
also
an
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increasing
trend of demand more to supply less. For an example,
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increasing
lot of housing accommodation. In
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addition
to this, it
also
impacts on the quality of
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schooling
. The rate of students is getting enrolled more, which
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results
the ratio of students
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are
more per each
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class
.

To
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begin
with the solution to the above
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challenges
, we
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need
to solve this by taking preventive actions.
Firstly
, there should be
clearly
measured policies outlined by the authority. I would
firstly
possibly
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begin
to resolve
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population
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problem
.
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Because
, all
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challenges
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related
to pollution and
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schooling
are due to increased
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population
. We
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need
to
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think
of how we can
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reduce
the birth rate. For an instance, In India, there is a promotion of policies with a quote saying “We Two Our Two”. The
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government
should
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only
provide compensation to the parents who
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has
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only
one child.
Secondly
, the ministry should take precaution steps on providing
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better
infrastructure by providing
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better
transport facilities. As a
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result
of this, this will
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reduce
a significant traffic increase. In
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addition
to this, authority should promote more to protect the forest and jungles to
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reduce
construction by declaring those lands as a green land. In
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addition
to this, although the state has responsibilities to resolve these
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challenges
, every citizen should
also
take equal responsibilities. For an instance, we should
be inspired
to plant more trees in our surroundings. In
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addition
to this, we should
really
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think
about family planning to ensure we have
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only
one or two children at most, which would
eventually
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help
in providing
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better
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schooling
for them and reducing
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population
as well
.

To recapitulate, although there are various
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challenges
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related
to our environment,
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population
and
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schooling
, there are
also
various solutions to these
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challenges
. If every
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government
and citizen take
equally
preventive steps, we can
really
be able to protect our surrounding, provide
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better
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schooling
and
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reduce
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population
as well
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you prefer traveling alone or traveling with a companion? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
493 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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