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Some people like to cook their meal at home. Other prefer to eat at restaurant or cafeteria. What do you prefer? v.1

Some people like to cook their meal at home. Other prefer to eat at restaurant or cafeteria. What do you prefer? v. 1
Is gender affecting the choice of the courses that students choose for their higher education in schools and universities. It is commonly said that girls prefer art subjects, whereas boys choose science. This essay intended to analyse the reasons and the changing trends about it. One main reason for graduates to select subjects according to gender is carrier interests. The existing social stratification classifieds various professions according to sex of individuals; less physically demanding jobs for females while risky and physically challenging works for males. In other words, the majority of females choose teaching as their carrier path rather than technical jobs, which requires physical strength and science knowledge. As a result girls prefer art subjects like literature, politics or history; however, boys tend to select challenging subjects such as marine, automobile and aeronautical science because they are ready to face adventures in their professional life. For instance, a study conducted by the queen's university found that only 5 percent of men opted to teach as their carrier in 2000 in London. In my opinion the current trends of gender discrimination in all fields are significantly reduced while compared with the past 5 decades. The choice of subjects in the field of secondary and tertiary education has changed a lot in these years, most of the students consider their interests rather than common trends. Many women shown their talents in male dominated carriers and wise versa. For example, Neha Uddhav, the first female pilot in the Indian air force, became as an inspiration for many young ladies in India. In conclusion, huge numbers of females choose arts subjects and their male counterparts prefer science subjects instead. The main reason for this is social stratification of carrier choices; in addition, this trend has been changing recently due to student's interests in choosing subjects.
Is gender affecting the choice of the courses that students
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choose
for their higher education in schools and universities. It is
commonly
said that girls prefer art
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subjects
, whereas boys
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choose
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science
. This essay intended to
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analyse
the reasons and the changing
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trends
about it.

One main reason for graduates to select
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subjects
according to gender is
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carrier
interests. The existing social stratification classifieds various professions according to sex of individuals; less
physically
demanding jobs for
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females
while risky and
physically
challenging works for males.
In other words
, the majority of
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females
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choose
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teaching
as their
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carrier
path
rather
than technical jobs, which requires physical strength and
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science
knowledge.
As a result
girls prefer art
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subjects
like literature, politics or history;
however
, boys tend to select challenging
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subjects
such as marine, automobile and aeronautical
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science
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because
they are ready to face adventures in their professional life.
For instance
, a study conducted by the queen's university found that
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only
5 percent of
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men
opted to teach as their
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carrier
in 2000 in London.

In my opinion the
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current
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trends
of gender discrimination in all fields are
significantly
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reduced
while compared with the past 5 decades. The choice of
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subjects
in the field of secondary and tertiary education has
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changed
a lot in these years, most of the students consider their interests
rather
than common
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trends
.
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Many
women shown their talents in male dominated
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carriers
and wise versa.
For example
,
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Neha
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Uddhav
, the
first
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female
pilot in the Indian air force, became as an inspiration for
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many
young ladies in India.

In conclusion
, huge numbers of
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females
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choose
arts
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subjects
and their male counterparts prefer
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science
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subjects
instead
. The main reason for this is social stratification of
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carrier
choices;
in addition
, this
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trend
has been changing recently due to student's interests in choosing
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subjects
.
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IELTS essay Some people like to cook their meal at home. Other prefer to eat at restaurant or cafeteria. What do you prefer? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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