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As languages such as English, Spinish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice? v.1

As languages such as English, Spinish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice? v. 1
"Charity begins at home" is the saying used when it comes to beginning of any work at any point of time, but it does not apply to the act of helping people of our surroundings, community and our country than helping everyone who needs help in the world. This subject is quite subjective in nature, however, when it comes to providing aid, boundaries should not be an issue. Firstly, one should have sympathy, feel for the people in distress and pain, irrespective of their religion, race and country. One cannot think about supporting others by having pre-conceived notions about, whom and where to extend helping hands. . For example, Mother Teresa travelled different nations to help the poors and minors in countries like India. She not only helped natives of her own country, but also went extra miles to give whatever she had in her. Secondly, the world has become a small place. It is quite simple to help people via different methods. Also, one can support by giving money, sending clothes and other necessary things for survival. To illustrate this, countries like Indonesia still face after effects of natural calamity like a Tsunami. Had the people of different nook and corner not supported them, it would have been difficult for them to revive. Support knows no boundaries. It is vital to help people of your own vicinity but it is selfish to not help that of outside. One cannot be so uni-directional. To conclude, I disagree with that we cannot help everyone who needs help in the world. One must be selfless, full of compassion and should not inhibit when it comes to helping by travelling on thorns a bit.
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Charity
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at home
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is the saying
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when it
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comes
to beginning of any work at any point of time,
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but
it does not apply to the act of helping
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people
of our surroundings, community and our
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country
than helping everyone who needs
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help
in the world. This subject is quite subjective in nature,
however
, when it
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comes
to providing aid, boundaries should not be an issue.

Firstly
, one should have sympathy, feel for the
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people
in distress and pain, irrespective of their religion, race and
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country
. One cannot
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think
about supporting others by having
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pre-conceived
notions about, whom and where to extend helping hands.
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For example
, Mother Teresa travelled
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different
nations to
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help
the
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poors
and minors in
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countries
like India. She not
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only
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helped
natives of her
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country
,
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but
also
went extra miles to give whatever she had in her.

Secondly
, the world has become a
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small
place. It is quite simple to
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help
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people
via
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different
methods.
Also
, one can support by giving money, sending clothes and other necessary things for survival. To illustrate this,
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countries
like Indonesia
still
face after effects of natural calamity like a Tsunami. Had the
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people
of
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different
nook and corner not supported them, it would have been difficult for them to revive.

Support knows no boundaries. It is vital to
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help
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people
of your
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own
vicinity
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but
it is selfish to not
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help
that of outside. One cannot be
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so
uni-directional.

To conclude
, I disagree with that we cannot
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help
everyone who needs
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help
in the world. One
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must
be selfless, full of compassion and should not inhibit when it
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comes
to helping by travelling on thorns a bit.
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IELTS essay As languages such as English, Spinish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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