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1. Do you think consumers should avoid over packaged products or it is the responsibility of the producer to avoid extra packaging of products? ” Give your views or any relevant example with your own experience. v.1

1. Do you think consumers should avoid over packaged products or it is the responsibility of the producer to avoid extra packaging of products? ” Give your views or any relevant example with your own experience. v. 1
Nowadays, many people often face problematic situations in their life. Some masses think that it is good to sacrifice with their dreams by accepting awful things while others believe to try to overcome the problems and get the best result in the future. This essay will elucidate both the views so that a plausible conclusion can be formed. I personally agree with the second view. On one hand, sometimes people have to assent the terrible situations to have stable income and comfort in their life. For example, a university graduated student who is trying to get relevant skilled jobs, he may not get that kind of job so that he might be working in other fields with underpay to fulfil their needs. Furthermore, earning less money can give us more happiness rather than doing any illegal activities to earn a lot of money. Hence, accepting the bad things make you more comfort instead of rejecting it make the such vast ambitions in the future. On the other hand, some masses define that the best way to handle with bad things is always trying to improve it and make it better. Everyone knows that hard work is the key of success, so that if we put some efforts to solve the problem may get good results in the future. For instance, my neighbourhood's son wants to take admission in University. He belongs to a poor family and his parents cannot afford too much expense of his study, but due to his hard work in a study he got a scholarship for further study at university. He is a doctor now and able to fulfil his parents' dreams as well. To recapitulate, it can be concluded that people would know which is better the result of accepting the bad situation or try to improve the situation because nothing is impossible in this world. Both views have own physical and mental benefits, but I opine that always try to put efforts to make the things better.
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face problematic
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situations
in their life.
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masses
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to sacrifice with their dreams by accepting awful things while others believe to try to overcome the problems and
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the best result in the future. This essay will elucidate both the views
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that a plausible conclusion can
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assent the terrible
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situations
to have stable income and comfort in their life.
For example
, a university graduated student who is trying to
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get
relevant skilled jobs, he may not
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get
that kind of job
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that he might be working in other fields with underpay to fulfil their needs.
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money.
Hence
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things
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you more comfort
instead
of rejecting it
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the such vast ambitions in the future.

On the other hand
,
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masses define that the best way to handle with
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things is always trying to
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it and
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it better. Everyone knows that
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work is the key of success,
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that if we put
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efforts to solve the problem may
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get
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results in the future.
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's son wants to take admission in University. He belongs to a poor family and his parents cannot afford too much expense of his study,
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got
a scholarship for
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study at university. He is a doctor
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now
and able to fulfil his parents' dreams
as well
.

To recapitulate, it can
be concluded
that
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people
would know which is better the result of accepting the
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bad
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situation
or try to
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improve
the
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situation
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because
nothing is impossible in this world. Both views have
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own
physical and mental benefits,
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but
I opine that always try to put efforts to
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make
the things better.
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IELTS essay 1. Do you think consumers should avoid over packaged products or it is the responsibility of the producer to avoid extra packaging of products? ” Give your views or any relevant example with your own experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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