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University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.8

University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. v. 8
However, many people still being able to complete their works by just hands. I believe that machines completely can regulate those works with better superiority and spend short period of time. In this essay, i will discuss reasons and examples to support my point of view. To begin with, Machines totally can regulate those works better than human. Even the man brainy men whose are able to calculate immediately many equations in their head and, then, quickly answer the question, will never be simple computer or a calculator. Therefore, several positions related with mathematics such as accountants, scientists and engineers will certainly perform faster and more precise by using, at least, the computer and calculator. Moreover, using such calculators always give the right mathematical answer. Second, Machines can work neater than people. Although, people look very neat and so attractive or charismatic that it is always so beautiful that it does not always mean that, and plus, machines even look dirty or dusty also it is the same. If you want to write a few letters by hand, it probably become a little bit messy. If you type your letters using by computer, it is obviously going to have clean and efficiency. There is no matter how your computer and you look like. Third, present-day machines support the creativity of people. Machines are becoming more and more professional or perfect. Many ideas and feature and some equipment can be added, altered or removed, easily by using the computers. What this means is that people have no doubt use the machines or computers which are able to support the development of people. In conclusion, i suggest that people, if possible, use machines and technologies to perform their work because they will finish it faster, neater and better than to work in hands.
However
,
many
people
still
being able to complete their works by
just
hands. I believe that
machines
completely can regulate those works with better superiority and spend short period of time. In this essay,
i
will discuss reasons and examples to support my point of view.

To
begin
with,
Machines
totally
can regulate those works better than human. Even the
man
brainy
men
whose are able to calculate immediately
many
equations in their head and, then,
quickly
answer the question, will never be simple computer or a calculator.
Therefore
, several positions related with mathematics such as accountants, scientists and engineers will
certainly
perform faster and more precise by using, at least, the computer and calculator.
Moreover
, using such calculators always give the right mathematical answer.

Second,
Machines
can
work
neater than
people
. Although,
people
look
very
neat and
so
attractive or charismatic that it is always
so
beautiful
that it does not always mean that, and plus,
machines
even look dirty or dusty
also
it is the same. If you want to write a few letters by hand, it
probably
become
a
little bit
messy. If you type your letters using by computer, it is
obviously
going to have clean and efficiency. There is no matter how your computer and you look like.

Third, present-day
machines
support the creativity of
people
.
Machines
are becoming more and more professional or perfect.
Many
ideas
and feature and
some
equipment can be
added
, altered or removed,
easily
by using the computers. What this means is that
people
have no doubt
use
the
machines
or computers which are able to support the development of
people
.

In conclusion
,
i
suggest that
people
, if possible,
use
machines
and technologies to perform their
work
because
they will finish it faster, neater and better than to
work
in hands.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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