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University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. v. 2
The focusing of one specialist subject among the university students is debatable. The Major portion of students believe that studying a range of subjects is an extra benefit, while the rest of the crowd tends to focus on one subject. This essay will provide strong evidence for choosing a range of subjects in the curriculum. All the universities, should motivate their students to study a range of subjects with their main subject, as having knowledge in one subject will narrow down their carrier and at times may also create a situation of unemployment. The Unemployment tends to create more fear among the individuals, and in few situations this many also lead to the mental stress. If the candidates wish to learn just their main subject, it develops disinterest in them in a long run, which makes them to score less. However, after learning a variety of subjects, one can choose their interested domain and then can narrow down for future specialization. If at that time the job opportunities for their own subject has gone down, one can also work in other sectors. As, an illustration if one needs to get employed, that person should be good at communication skills, so for this the basic English course must be taken. It is interesting to note that many of the subjects are interrelated with each other. Gaining knowledge in many fields will produce a good individual, in such a manner, the individuals will be able to fit into any sort of jobs. To give a clear example, a doctor who is specialised in taking MRI scans needs have basic knowledge of physics. So, from this also it is depicted that each and every subject is based on one another. Clearly, the student with the all-round knowledge has an apparent advantage of shining more. In conclusion, it is strongly evident that the student who has wide knowledge about many subjects tend to get a better position in the society. The Unemployment rate is brought down to a greater extent and stress is also reduced, as both the unemployment and the stress are directly proportional to each other.
The focusing of one specialist
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subject
among the university
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students
is debatable. The Major portion of
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students
believe that studying a range of
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subjects
is an extra benefit, while the rest of the crowd tends to focus on one
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subject
. This essay will provide strong evidence for choosing a range of
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subjects
in the curriculum.

All the universities, should motivate their
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students
to study a range of
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subjects
with their main
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subject
, as having
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knowledge
in one
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subject
will narrow
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down
their carrier and at times may
also
create a situation of
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unemployment
. The
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Unemployment
tends to create more fear among the individuals, and in few situations this
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many
also
lead to the mental
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stress
. If the candidates wish to learn
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just
their main
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subject
, it develops disinterest in them in a long run, which
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makes
them to score less.
However
, after learning a variety of
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subjects
, one can choose their interested domain and then can narrow
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down
for future specialization. If at that time the job opportunities for their
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own
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subject
has gone
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down
, one can
also
work in other sectors. As, an illustration if one needs to
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get
employed, that person should be
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good
at communication
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skills
,
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so
for this the basic English course
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must
be taken
.

It is interesting to note that
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many
of the
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subjects
are interrelated
with each other. Gaining
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knowledge
in
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many
fields will produce a
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good
individual, in such a manner, the individuals will be able to fit into any sort of jobs. To give a
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clear
example, a doctor who is
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specialised
in taking MRI scans needs have basic
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knowledge
of physics.
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So
, from this
also
it
is depicted
that each and every
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subject
is based
on one another.
Clearly
, the
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student
with the all-round
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knowledge
has an apparent advantage of shining more.

In conclusion
, it is
strongly
evident that the
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student
who has wide
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knowledge
about
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many
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subjects
tend to
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get
a better position in the society. The
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Unemployment
rate
is brought
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down
to a greater extent and
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stress
is
also
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reduced
, as both the
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unemployment
and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
are
directly
proportional to each other.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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