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Crime is a big problem in the world; and many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion. v.1

Crime is a big problem in the world; and many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. Give your own opinion. v. 1
One of the major problems in todays world is the crime. Many people think that no one can do anything to prevent the crime. I completely disagree with the view and this essay will highlight some of the key points regarding my point of view. Crime is increasing every in our daily life and whenever we turn on our television or radio we can see that some crime is happening somewhere in the world. We notice that every country is taking many actions to reduce the crime rate and punishing those who breaks the law. But we do not see any hint that the crime rate is decreasing around the globe. As a result, many people have become hopeless and they have started to think that there is nothing to do to stop the crime. My opinion is completely different from that view because I believe no matter how much the crime rate is increased, there is always a solution. I think only tightening the law and order will not help to fight the crime. We have to find the root cause of all the crime and solve that problem. I believe the main problem is the fact that people are becoming immoral day by day. The core values of human being are decreasing and people are consumed by greed, money, wealth and other material things. As a result, they can do anything even break the law in order to get what they want. My solution to this problem is to give emphasis on the moral teaching of children from a very early age. Both family and educational institutions should give moral training the highest priority. If the children get moral training, then our next generation will see a crime free time. To summarize, we can say that even though the crime rate seems to be increasing day by day, we should not lose our hope and try our best to fight against the crime in all possible ways. If we all work together, only then we will be able to defeat the crime and our future generation will live in a peaceful world.
One of the major
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todays
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people
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that no one can do anything to
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. I completely disagree with the view and this essay will highlight
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some of the
key points regarding my point of view.

Crime is increasing every in our daily life and whenever we turn on our television or radio we can
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see
that
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some
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crime
is happening somewhere in the world. We notice that every country is taking
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many
actions to
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reduce
the
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crime
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rate
and punishing those who breaks the law.
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we do not
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see
any hint that the
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crime
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rate
is decreasing around the globe.
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people
have become
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hopeless and
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the crime.

My opinion is completely
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from that view
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I believe no matter how much the
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rate
is increased
, there is always a solution. I
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think
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only
tightening the law and order will not
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help
to fight the
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crime
. We
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have to
find the root cause of all the
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crime
and solve that
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problem
. I believe the main
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problem
is the fact that
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people
are becoming immoral day by day. The core values of human being are decreasing and
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people
are consumed
by greed, money, wealth and other material things.
As a result
, they can do anything even break the law in order to
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get
what they want. My solution to this
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problem
is to give emphasis on the moral teaching of children from a
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very
early age. Both family and educational institutions should give moral training the highest priority. If the children
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get
moral training, then our
next
generation will
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see
a
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crime
free time.

To summarize
, we can say that
even though
the
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crime
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rate
seems to be increasing day by day, we should not lose our hope and try our best to fight against the
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crime
in all possible ways. If we all work together,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
then we will be able to defeat the
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crime
and our future generation will
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live
in a peaceful world.
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IELTS essay Crime is a big problem in the world; and many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. Give your own opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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