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University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the internet for students to read and so the importance of attending face to face lectures has been reduced. Do you believe the use of the internet in formal education is a good idea? What future effects will the internet have on academic study? v.1

University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the internet for students to read and so the importance of attending face to face lectures has been reduced. Do you believe the use of the internet in formal education is a good idea? What future effects will the internet have on academic study? v. 1
Nowadays it has become common among lecturers to use technology and teach the students via internet. Consequently, there is no need for physical attendance in university. I consider this way far effective rather than traditional way it used to be. A good reason for remote learning is being time saving. Going to university is a time consuming and tiresome routine while students can learn in their room by net and students will use the saved time for doing the assignments or recreational activities. For instance, a recent research which has been done by an IT lecturer of university of Manitoba in 2018 showed that, around 80% of the students felt bore as they do not come to educational institution cause classes had been done in their room. Furthermore, loads of materials, such as books, articles, films and so on, are shown which is not possible in the classroom. As a result lecturer and students have access to wider sources when they are in the class. After that, Concerning about the future of academic study, internet will take the control of everything and students see themselves needless to attend in university. Internet has built a great network for everything one needs to know whether you want a certificate or not. Thus, the need for a physical place to learn things will be eliminated, however, the big universities will stay to gather elites together. In conclusion, I agree with the idea of using technology and internet in education while it gives a plethora of information to students and they can learn virtually wherever they are. The future is more internet based rather than attending in a physical classroom environment.
Nowadays it has become common among lecturers to
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use
technology and teach the
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students
via internet.
Consequently
, there is no need for physical attendance in
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university
. I consider this way far effective
rather
than traditional way it
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used
to be.

A
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good
reason for remote learning is being time saving. Going to
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university
is a
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time consuming
and tiresome routine while
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students
can learn in their room by net and
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students
will
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use
the saved time for doing the assignments or recreational activities.
For instance
, a recent research which has
been done
by an IT lecturer of
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university
of Manitoba in 2018
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showed
that, around 80% of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
felt bore as they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to educational institution cause classes had
been done
in their room.
Furthermore
, loads of materials, such as books, articles, films and
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so
on,
are shown
which is not possible in the classroom.
As a result
lecturer and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
have access to wider sources when they are in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.

After that, Concerning about the future of academic study, internet will take the control of everything and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
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see
themselves needless to attend in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
. Internet has built a great network for everything one needs to know whether you want a certificate or not.
Thus
, the need for a physical place to learn things will
be eliminated
,
however
, the
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big
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universities
will stay to gather elites together.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of using technology and internet in education while it gives a plethora of information to
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students and
they can learn
virtually
wherever they are. The future is more internet based
rather
than attending in a physical classroom environment.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the internet for students to read and so the importance of attending face to face lectures has been reduced. Do you believe the use of the internet in formal education is a good idea? What future effects will the internet have on academic study? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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