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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance listening from the internet rather than face-to-face interaction in the classroom. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? v.1

Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance listening from the internet rather than face-to-face interaction in the classroom. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? v. 1
First and foremost, studying via internet is advantageous due to less time wasted. When students leave their home to commute to the university or college, most of them spend hours on the roads. It exhausts them and even may result in falling behind on studies. For instance, I have a hard time to initiate working on my studies when I come home from university due to exhaustion. Secondly, it avoids the compulsion to take notes during the class, because students have access to myriad academic articles in distant learning courses. The necessity to take notes is a disturbing and exhausting factor which students always complain about. According to the survey conducted among the Harvard university students, more than 80% of students despise the action of writing down the academic materials. On the contradictory, taking online courses decreases human interaction, and this leads to having inadequate communication skills. Communication skills are crucial to learners’ education and future lives and thus the importance of human interaction cannot be neglected. For example, in Australia, students who have taken an online learning course instead of attending to school and academy lament over it because they are in lack of aptitude to utilize the words in an effective method. Another obvious demerit to point out is undergraduates get used to sluggish lifestyle. The biggest downside of this is students may become inactive in their further activities. Living a sedentary life can decline the passion to enhance one’s knowledge and skills. According to BBC news, nowadays there are extremely obvious differences between students’ liveliness who attend educational institutions regularly and who take online courses from the internet.
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and foremost, studying via internet is advantageous due to less time wasted. When
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their home to commute to the university or college, most of them spend hours on the roads. It exhausts them and even may result in falling behind on studies.
For instance
, I have a
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time to initiate working on my studies when I
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come
home from university due to exhaustion.

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, it avoids the compulsion to take notes during the
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,
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because
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students
have access to myriad academic articles in distant learning
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courses
. The necessity to take notes is a disturbing and exhausting factor which
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students
always complain about. According to the survey conducted among the
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Harvard university
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students
, more than 80% of
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students
despise the action of writing down the academic materials.

On the contradictory, taking online
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courses
decreases human interaction, and this leads to having inadequate communication
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skills
. Communication
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skills
are crucial to learners’ education and future
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lives
and
thus
the importance of human interaction cannot
be neglected
.
For example
, in Australia,
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students
who have taken an online learning
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course
instead
of attending to school and academy lament over it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are in lack of aptitude to utilize the words in an effective method.

Another obvious demerit to point out is undergraduates
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get
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used
to sluggish lifestyle. The biggest downside of this is
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students
may become inactive in their
further
activities. Living a sedentary life can decline the passion to enhance one’s knowledge and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. According to BBC news, nowadays there are
extremely
obvious differences between
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students’
liveliness who attend educational institutions
regularly
and who take online
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courses
from the internet.
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IELTS essay Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance listening from the internet rather than face-to-face interaction in the classroom. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? v. 1

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271 words
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