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in the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

in the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. with this opinion? v. 1
Nowadays, the development of technology for education has changed traditional methods of teaching in schools. Many people think that students no more need to be present at lectures, due to the development of technology. In my opinion, technology in education has both benefits and disadvantages. On the one hand, technology dominates over convenience and diversity. An outstanding advantage of online learning is you can join a class to study anywhere and anytime. It is suitable for people who have difficulty in arranging time and finding places to study. Students can study via computers or smart phones connected to the internet. In online classes, you can choose any lessons you are interested in to study first. Besides, students can do the tests online instead of writing by hand On the other hand, teachers can stimulate student's interest and keep them focused on studying. If students wonder about the lessons, teachers have ability to answer your questions clearly than internet can do. Moreover, attending lectures can create an environment for students to communicate with others. Students not only learn academic subjects, but also learn social skills from teachers and friends. Besides, schools must spend a lot of money on investing modern learning facilities such as computers, projectors… Both attending lectures and online lectures have their own advantages. I believe that it will be better if these methods combined properly, the quality of education will be higher.
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technology
for education has
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changed
traditional methods of teaching in schools.
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people
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think
that
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students
no more need to be present at
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lectures
, due to the development of
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technology
. In my opinion,
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technology
in education has both benefits and disadvantages.

On the one hand,
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technology
dominates over convenience and diversity. An outstanding advantage of
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online
learning is you can
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join
a
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class
to
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study
anywhere and anytime. It is suitable for
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people
who have difficulty in arranging time and finding places to
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study
.
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Students
can
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study
via computers or smart phones connected to the internet. In
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online
classes, you can choose any lessons you
are interested
in to
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study
first
.
Besides
,
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students
can do the
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tests
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online
instead
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On the other hand
, teachers can stimulate student's interest and
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keep
them focused on studying. If
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students
wonder about the lessons, teachers have ability to answer your questions
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clearly
than internet can do.
Moreover
, attending
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lectures
can create an environment for
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students
to communicate with others.
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Students
not
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only
learn academic subjects,
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but
also
learn social
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skills
from teachers and friends.
Besides
, schools
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must
spend
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a lot of
money on investing modern learning facilities such as computers, projectors…

Both attending
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lectures
and
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online
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lectures
have their
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own
advantages. I believe that it will be better if these methods combined
properly
, the quality of education will be higher.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay in the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. with this opinion? v. 1

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2 paragraphs
234 words
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