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University education should be free. Do you agree or disagree? Why? Use examples and reasons to develop your argument. v.2

University education should be free. Why? Use examples and reasons to develop your argument. v. 2
Higher education should be free of charge and supported by the governments for all citizens. In my opinion, if universities were out of charge and governments supported them financially, this would lead to a high level society and high quality of life. I think the most obvious reason is that everybody has right to use higher education facilities to improve their skills and follow their goals and dreams in the lifetime. For example students from middle class or low class families should have higher educational opportunities as well as high class ones. If students do not have to pay tuition fees, they will not have to inter in job market earlier. This means that they will inter in the right work place at the right time. Because of the university’s cost most of the students have to get a part-time job or in some cases they unwillingly postponed their education goals. Furthermore, level of life in the society will rise by supporting universities financially. In a matter of fact, free education will ensure that the workforce is at the required level of skills. Thus specialization and innovations in work places will increase. on the other hand, the paths of development will decrease in the society. Moreover, in terms of higher standard of works, the governments will take the money back through development and high standard life. To sum up, In order to qualified students do not lose their opportunities of making their proficiency better and getting well-paid careers, higher education should be free for everyone and universities should be places to produce professional experts from all levels of society.
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education
should be free of charge and supported by the
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governments
for all citizens. In my opinion, if
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universities
were out of charge and
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governments
supported them
financially
, this would lead to a
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high
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level
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society
and
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high
quality of life.

I
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the most obvious reason is that everybody has right to
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use
higher
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education
facilities to
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improve
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skills
and follow their goals and dreams in the lifetime.
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students
from middle
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class
or low
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class
families should have higher educational opportunities
as well
as
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high
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class
ones. If
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students
do not
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have to
pay tuition fees, they will not
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have to
inter in job market earlier. This means that they will inter in the right work place at the right time.
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of the
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university’s
cost most of the
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students
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have to
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get
a part-time job or in
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some
cases they
unwillingly
postponed their
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education
goals.

Furthermore
,
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level
of life in the
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society
will rise by supporting
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universities
financially
. In a matter of fact, free
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education
will ensure that the workforce is at the required
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level
of
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skills
.
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Thus
specialization and innovations in work places will increase.
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on
the other hand, the paths of development will decrease in the
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society
.
Moreover
, in terms of higher standard of works, the
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governments
will take the money back through development and
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high
standard life.

To sum up, In order to qualified
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students
do not lose their opportunities of making their proficiency better and getting well-paid careers, higher
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education
should be free for everyone and
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universities
should be places to produce professional experts from all
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levels
of
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society
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay University education should be free. Why? Use examples and reasons to develop your argument. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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