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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.463

People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 463
Automobiles have become very essential part for most of the families in any part of the world. Some people think that its better to wal rather than dependent on vehicle. On the other hand, others believe that it si very important. I totally agree that humans in this generation have been relying more on automobiles. I agree beacause of the several reasons which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, vehicles helps us to save our lots of time. As transportation facilities has increased, it has become more beneficial for us whcih ultimately saves time. My own example is compelling example of it. I was working in cornwall which is situated sixty miles away from my place that is Ottawa. When I got the job, initially I was commuting in public transport which took me about 2 hours for one way and same back to return. Then, I bought my car in one month which now takes only one hour back and forth. In this way, use of vehicle may prove beneficial for us in our work. Furthermore, cars may be very comfortable for all the family member or friends to visit at the same and enjoying together. Lets take an example of my friend Andy' s family. His family has 8 memeber. Andy' s father got eight seater SUV car in Chicago. Earlier they were having sidden four seater which many of his family member would not be able to travel together while they go for vacation. In this manner, having dependent on car would make a difference enjoying together which they could not if they were using public transport buses. Thus, with this new SUV now they can go for all the family member together. Finally, automobiles may be used as passion. Many people are fond of having different types of cars and trucks. For instance, Elon Musk, who is the founder of Tesla. He is very energetic in making new cars and trucks. He made electric car which made a revolution in the field of automoblie. Moreover, he also launched cyber truck just few days ago whcih has elegant features which may prove to be fascinating for the future genertaions. Therefore, vehicles may become passion for some people. In conclusion, I totally agree with people dependent on automobiles as it saves time while commuting, enjoy fun time together with friends and family and may turn out passion for some individuals.
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Automobiles
have become
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very
essential part for most of the
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families
in any part of the world.
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Some
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people
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think
that its better to
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wal
rather
than dependent on
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vehicle
.
On the other hand
, others believe that
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it si
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very
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important
.

I
totally
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agree
that humans in this generation have been relying more on
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automobiles
. I
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agree
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beacause
of the several reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

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First of all
,
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vehicles
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helps
us to save our lots of
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time
. As transportation facilities has increased, it has become more beneficial for us
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whcih
ultimately
saves
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time
. My
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own
example is compelling example of it. I was working in
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cornwall
which
is situated
sixty miles away from my place
that is
Ottawa. When I
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got
the job,
initially
I was commuting in public transport which took me about 2 hours for one way and same back to return. Then, I
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bought
my
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car
in one month which
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now
takes
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only
one hour back and forth. In this way,
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use
of
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vehicle
may prove beneficial for us in our work.

Furthermore
,
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cars
may be
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very
comfortable for all the
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family
member or friends to visit at the same and enjoying together.
Did you mean "Let's" (let's = let us; lets = 3rd person singular of 'let')?
Lets
take an example of my friend
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Andy&
#039; s
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family
. His
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family
has 8
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memeber
.
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Andy&
#039; s father
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got
eight seater SUV
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car
in Chicago. Earlier they were having
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sidden
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four seater
which
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many
of his
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family
member would not be able to travel together while they go for vacation. In this manner, having dependent on
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car
would
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make
a difference enjoying together which they could not if they were using public transport buses.
Thus
, with this new SUV
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now
they can go for all the
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family
member together.

Finally
,
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automobiles
may be
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used
as passion.
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Many
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people
are fond of having
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different
types of
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cars
and trucks.
For instance
, Elon Musk, who is the founder of Tesla. He is
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very
energetic in making new
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cars
and trucks. He made electric
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car
which made a revolution in the field of
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automoblie
.
Moreover
, he
also
launched cyber truck
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just
few days ago
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whcih
has elegant features which may prove to be fascinating for the future
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genertaions
.
Therefore
,
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vehicles
may become passion for
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some
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people
.

In conclusion
, I
totally
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agree
with
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people
dependent on
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automobiles
as it saves
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time
while commuting, enjoy fun
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time
together with friends and
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family
and may turn out passion for
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some
individuals.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS essay People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 463

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
406 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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