At the present time, there is a debate in each society about whether using the internet among youngsters in order to interact with other people is a positive or a negative progression. As far as I am concerned, socializing through the internet is a thoroughly negative development.
It is irrefutable that the majority of adolescents have squandered their exquisite time in social media far higher than doing their homework or learning novel skills these days. This is because we could not inhibit the burgeoning of technology in this modern century. Take Telegram as an example, the wide array of young individuals has been spending too much their time since this application published in Google Play and Apple Store, which means they purposeless merely waste their time by chatting with other users. As a result, it is manifest that ongoing this trend might cause an internet addiction, which is mentally too hazard for human health. Consequently, teenagers should be manipulated by their parents to proscribe them in excess of using the internet in this case.
Nevertheless, there are numerous offensive contents available on the internet which conveniently juveniles can access to them. Thus, the Internet is not really a good option for communicating youngsters. Indeed, they should interact with other people in person rather than online communication.
To sum up, in spite of the fact that socializing via the internet is popular amongst young people, but it causes inevitable more problems than merits. Based on the aforementioned reasons, I believe that it is a negative development overall.
At the present
time
, there is a debate in each society about whether using the internet among youngsters in order to interact with other
people
is
a
positive
or a
negative
progression. As far as I
am concerned
, socializing through the internet is a
thoroughly
negative
development.
It is irrefutable that the majority of adolescents have squandered their exquisite
time
in social media far higher than doing their homework or learning novel
skills
these days. This is
because
we could not inhibit the burgeoning of technology in this modern century. Take Telegram as an example, the wide array of young individuals has been spending too much their
time
since this application published in Google Play and Apple Store, which means they purposeless
merely
waste their
time
by chatting with other users.
As a result
, it is manifest that ongoing this trend might cause an internet addiction, which is mentally
too hazard
for human health.
Consequently
,
teenagers
should
be manipulated
by their parents to proscribe them in excess of using the internet
in this case
.
Nevertheless
, there are numerous offensive contents available on the internet which
conveniently
juveniles can access to them.
Thus
, the Internet is not
really
a
good
option for communicating youngsters.
Indeed
, they should interact with other
people
in person
rather
than online communication.
To sum up,
in spite of
the fact that socializing via the internet is popular
amongst
young
people
,
but
it causes inevitable more problems than merits. Based on the aforementioned reasons, I believe that it is a
negative
development
overall
.
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