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Traffic problems are increasing in most cities. What can be done about this? v.1

Traffic problems are increasing in most cities. What can be done about this? v. 1
In recent years, there are a growing number of transport problems in almost all metropolitan areas. Nevertheless, there are some feasible solutions can be taken to solve this issue. On the one hand, governments can encourage people to use more public transport or environmentally friendly vehicles instead of private ones. This solution not only reduces the congestion during rush hours, but also limits the toxic fumes which are adversely affecting people's health. There are many ways to implement this solution. For instance, governments could lower the prices transport and expand the timetable. Besides, they also can install more cycle lanes and pedestrian lanes stimulate citizens to use more bicycles or to walk more. One the other hand, charging private vehicle users a levy and prevent private transports in city areas on certain day should be taken into account. Firstly, by imposing taxes on drivers, governments could also raise a fund for road maintenance purposes. Secondly, banning cars or other private transports in city center on certain days will reduce the risk of traffic accidents or transportation jams. For example, councils and governments could charge each car users $2 each time they drive their cars on the street. Moreover, they should prevent all private vehicles from the city centre on the weekends to avoid transport problems. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that although the rate of traffic issues is the alarming increase in many big cities, there are some possible solutions can be done to solve the problems. Firstly, governments can adjust the prices and timetable of public transport, or they can install more bicycle lanes to promote citizens to avoid using private vehicles. Secondly, councils and governments could also impose taxes on car drivers and ban cars from city on the weekends to reduce the risk of traffic problems
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transport
problems in almost all metropolitan areas.
Nevertheless
, there are
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some
feasible
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be taken
to solve this issue.

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governments
can encourage
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people
to
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use
more public
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transport
or
environmentally
friendly
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vehicles
instead
of
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private
ones. This
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solution
not
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only
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reduces
the congestion during rush hours,
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but
also
limits the toxic fumes which are
adversely
affecting
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people
's health. There are
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many
ways to implement this
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solution
.
For instance
,
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governments
could lower the prices
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transport
and expand the timetable.
Besides
, they
also
can install more cycle lanes and pedestrian lanes stimulate citizens to
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use
more bicycles or to walk more.

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the other hand, charging
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private
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vehicle
users a levy and
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prevent
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private
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transports
in city areas on certain day should
be taken
into account.
Firstly
, by imposing taxes on drivers,
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governments
could
also
raise a fund for road maintenance purposes.
Secondly
, banning
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cars
or other
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private
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transports
in city center on certain days will
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reduce
the
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risk
of traffic accidents or transportation jams.
For example
, councils and
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governments
could charge each
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car
users $2 each time they drive their
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cars
on the street.
Moreover
, they should
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prevent
all
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private
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vehicles
from the city
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centre
on the weekends to avoid
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transport
problems.

In conclusion
, I would like to reiterate that although the rate of traffic issues is the alarming increase in
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many
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big
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cities
, there are
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some
possible
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solutions
can
be done
to solve the problems.
Firstly
,
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governments
can adjust the prices and timetable of public
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transport
, or they can install more bicycle lanes to promote citizens to avoid using
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private
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vehicles
.
Secondly
, councils and
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governments
could
also
impose taxes on
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car
drivers and ban
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cars
from city on the weekends to
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reduce
the
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risk
of traffic problems
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Traffic problems are increasing in most cities. What can be done about this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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