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tpo9. task4The Establishing ShotFilm directors use different types of camera shots for specific purposes. An establishing shot is an image shown briefly at the beginning of a scene, usually taken from far away, that is used to provide context for the rest v.1

tpo9. task4The Establishing ShotFilm directors use different types of camera shots for specific purposes. An establishing shot is an image shown briefly at the beginning of a scene, usually taken from far away, that is used to provide context for the rest v. 1
Some people prefer to do food shopping online as it can be easier because people do not need extra fee to get to the shop. However, I agree with those who think that go to supermarket directly for food shopping, since the quality is more guaranteed. Online shopping is more convenient but also more expensive. For getting the food, the buyers have to spend adding the costs of the delivery charge. Moreover, they cannot guarantee the quality of the product. People can only see the picture without touch and smell it to make sure the food is worthy to buy. Even though there are many trusted online stores that will not deceive the buyers, but people cannot ensure they will not be tricked. Furthermore, it can say that food shopping in supermarkets is considerably reasonable rather than in online shops. Although there will be travel expenses that must be released, going to supermarket immediately is extremely fun. Taking the shopping cart and walking through the shelves, then choosing anything food that wanted, it can bring us to the real shopping experience. Comparing with online shopping, buying food in supermarkets is safer. Everyone can check the quality of the product, especially the expired date. It is necessary to notice that the product is safe to consume, so that it does not endanger our health. In conclusion, I agree with those who prefer to do shopping in supermarkets. The feeling is absolutely different than online shopping that you can do it alone or with your families or friends.
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people
prefer to do
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food
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shopping
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online
as it can be easier
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because
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people
do not need extra fee to
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get
to the shop.
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, I
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agree
with those who
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think
that go to supermarket
directly
for
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food
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shopping
, since the quality is more guaranteed.

Online
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shopping
is more convenient
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but
also
more expensive. For getting the
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food
, the buyers
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have to
spend adding the costs of the delivery charge.
Moreover
, they cannot guarantee the quality of the product.
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People
can
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only
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see
the picture without touch and smell it to
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make
sure the
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food
is worthy to
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buy
.
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there are
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trusted
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online
stores that will not deceive the buyers,
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people
cannot ensure they will not
be tricked
.

Furthermore
, it can say that
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food
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shopping
in supermarkets is
considerably
reasonable
rather
than in
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online
shops. Although there will be travel expenses that
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must
be released
, going to supermarket immediately is
extremely
fun. Taking the
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shopping
cart and walking through the shelves, then choosing anything
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food
that wanted, it can bring us to the real
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shopping
experience. Comparing with
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online
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shopping
, buying
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food
in supermarkets is safer. Everyone can
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check
the quality of the product,
especially
the expired date. It is necessary to notice that the product is safe to consume,
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so
that it does not endanger our health.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
with those who prefer to do
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shopping
in supermarkets. The feeling is
absolutely
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different
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than
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
that you can do it alone or with your families or friends.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay tpo9. task4The Establishing ShotFilm directors use different types of camera shots for specific purposes. An establishing shot is an image shown briefly at the beginning of a scene, usually taken from far away, that is used to provide context for the rest v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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