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TPO3-independentDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v.2

TPO3-independent It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v. 2
Some people prefer to keep their existent friends because they have many memorable memories together. On the other hand, some others prefer to be in touch with vast amount of people by meeting new ones every day. I personally believe life is too short to waste it by meeting some people regularly. First, it is just wasting time to tolerate some people who you don' t enjoy with only because they are your friends. In fact, some people just are worried if they can find new friends or they will be alone so they continue their friendship even though they really don' t like it. For instance, I remember when I was an elementary student one of my friends really annoyed me by some activities like joking with my appearance but I couldn' t give up our friendship because I was afraid of finding a new better friend. Moreover, I think it is a boring activity to meet some people every day who you know them completely and they don' t have any concealed aspect to discover anymore. In my life the thing I do is to leave them and try new ones. Second, I believe everyone has many life lessons to teach so more new people you meet, more lessons you learn. This word is full of interesting people and they are ready to be your friend and have good times together. Indeed, if we stick on our old friends and don' t try to find new ones we just will miss this amusing aspect of life. . New friends will open new doors and will provide new opportunities and we can gain in this way improving our life level. For instance, I remember how my new friend helped me finding my part time while I was studying in the university, although he didn' t know me very well. As a conclusion, in weighing pros and cons of trying new friendships I really believes its profits weigh its disadvantages. And I prefer to be associated with a fair amount of people instead of wasting my time with my old friends who don' t have anything new for me.
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people
prefer to
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keep
their existent
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friends
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because
they have
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many
memorable memories together.
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,
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some
others prefer to be in touch with vast amount of
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people
by meeting
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new
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ones
every day. I
personally
believe
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life
is too short to waste it by meeting
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some
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people
regularly
.

First
, it is
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just
wasting
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time
to tolerate
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some
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people
who you
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don&
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only
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because
they are your
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friends
. In fact,
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some
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people
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just
are worried
if they can find
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new
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friends or
they will be alone
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so
they continue their friendship
even though
they
really
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don&
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, I remember when I was an elementary student one of my
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friends
really
annoyed me by
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some
activities like joking with my appearance
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but
I
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couldn&
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because
I was afraid of finding a
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new
better
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friend
.
Moreover
, I
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think
it is a boring activity to
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meet
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some
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people
every day who you know them
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completely and
they
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don&
#039; t have any concealed aspect to discover anymore. In my
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life
the thing I do is to
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leave
them and try
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new
ones.

Second, I believe everyone has
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many
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life
lessons to teach
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so
more
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new
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people
you
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meet
, more lessons you learn. This word is full of interesting
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people and
they are ready to be your
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friend
and have
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good
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times
together.
Indeed
, if we stick on our
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old
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friends
and
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don&
#039; t try to find
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new
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ones
we
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will miss this amusing aspect of
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life
.
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.
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New
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friends
will open
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new
doors and will provide
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new
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opportunities and
we can gain in this way improving our
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life
level.
For instance
, I remember how my
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new
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friend
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helped
me
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finding
my part
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time
while I was studying in the university, although he
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didn&
#039; t know me
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very
well.

As a conclusion, in weighing pros and cons of trying
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new
friendships I
really
believes its profits weigh its disadvantages. And I prefer to
be associated
with a
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fair
amount of
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people
instead
of wasting my
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time
with my
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old
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friends
who
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don&
#039; t have anything
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new
for me.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO3-independent It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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