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Although some people believe that it is important to keep old friends than making new friends, in another group of people’s perspective making new friends is as important as keeping old friends. I am inclined to be not fully agreed or disagreed with tha v.2

Although some people believe that it is important to keep old friends than making new friends, in another group of people’s perspective making new friends is as important as keeping old friends. I am inclined to be not fully agreed or disagreed with tha v. 2
Although some people believe that it is important to keep old friends than making new friends, in another group of people’s perspective making new friends is as important as keeping old friends. I am inclined to be not fully agreed or disagreed with that statement. In some people’s points of views, old friends are important to keep them. In my thought also old friends are very important. If someone is our old friend it means that they are with us for a long time and as you know if they were not good people we could not be with them for a long time. In other words, it is important to care them because making friends depends on the chance and we should appreciate this chance and try not to lose them. Personally I have friends who are very close to me and we are on the same side in lots of thoughts and I really enjoy spending time, talking, and chatting with them. I am very comfortable with these people and I do not want to lose anyone of them. In spite of the facts that I mentioned above making new friends is as important as keeping old friends. Firstly, everybody knows that humankind has a social personality and he should make a relationship with other people. The best relationship is friendship due to the fact that we can talk to them confidently and freely. As a result, we should make more and more friends have this opportunity a lot in our lives. Secondly, everybody has his own thoughts and making a friend a lot means we can realize more thoughts and views. For instance, I really enjoy it when I talk with someone who is unfamiliar to me and look up his personality. To conclude, I do not completely agree or disagree with that statement. Keeping old friends is important but making new friends is important too. We should take care of our relations, friends and never forget to have new friends because we have to be updated in society in all aspects.
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personality and
he should
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. The best relationship is friendship due to the fact that we can talk to them
confidently
and
freely
.
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, we should
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make
more and more
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have this opportunity a lot in our
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.
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, everybody has his
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too. We should take care of our relations,
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and never forget to have
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friends
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because
we
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have to
be updated
in society in all aspects.
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47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Although some people believe that it is important to keep old friends than making new friends, in another group of people’s perspective making new friends is as important as keeping old friends. I am inclined to be not fully agreed or disagreed with tha v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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