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TPO 55: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO 55: When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
As you know, Technology is growing at a fast pace and influencing our daily life. The ways of communication between the members of specific social groups are dramatically influenced as well. For instance, in academic groups colleagues and professors widely use e-mail to communicate with each other and follow up on their projects. in this respect, some student believes that when colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project. I strongly agree with this opinion and in what follows I will elaborate on my viewpoint. First of all, one should take into account the fact that for every individual speaking is a much easier task than writing and people can convey their purpose more clearly when they talk to each other. Working on a project as a team is not a simple task and every step should be taken wisely. During a project, lots of questions may arise for team members. In this case, communicating via e-mail is not an appropriate approach since students tend to reply to e-mail as concise as possible. Usually, e-mail replies are not comprehensive and do not cover all of the necessary details. More importantly, there is always a probability that students misunderstand some points in an e-mail. Hence, it is more beneficial for students to arrange weekly meetings in order to follow up on projects. The second reason coming to mind is that communicating through e-mail has some limitations. For example, in some situations, students have to share their programs and code in order to find possible semantic errors but if the program is massive it can' t be delivered by e-mail. Also, there is always a probability that an email would not deliver to the receptionist and sometimes it is directly delivered to the spam box. My personal experience is compelling evidence of what I mean. Last year when I was working on my project I sent an important e-mail to my advisor. It was related to one of the outputs of my simulation. My advisor did not reply to my e-mail and when I asked her about it we realize that it was wrongly identified as spam and she did not see it. In short, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to draw the conclusion that the best mean of communicating with other colleagues and classmates about a project is talking about it in person by organizing a meeting. It is mainly due to the fact that e-mails are concise and do not contain details. Also, there is always the possibility that e-mail would not be delivered to the receptionist
As you know, Technology is growing at a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
pace and influencing our daily life. The ways of communication between the members of specific social groups are
dramatically
influenced
as well
.
For instance
, in academic groups colleagues and professors
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
e-mail to communicate with each other and follow up on their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
in
this respect,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
believes that when colleagues communicate about a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
in person
instead
of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
. I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this opinion and in what follows I will elaborate on my viewpoint.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, one should take into account the fact that for every individual speaking is a much easier task than writing and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can convey their purpose more
clearly
when they talk to each other. Working on a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
as a team is not a simple task and every step should
be taken
wisely
. During a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
, lots of questions may arise for team members.
In this case
, communicating via e-mail is not an appropriate approach since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
tend to reply to e-mail as concise as possible.
Usually
, e-mail replies are not comprehensive and do not cover
Consider using "all the".
all of the
necessary
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
. More
importantly
, there is always a probability that
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students
misunderstand
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
points in an e-mail.
Hence
, it is more beneficial for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to arrange weekly meetings in order to follow up on projects.

The second reason coming to mind is that communicating through e-mail has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
limitations.
For example
, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
situations,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
share their programs and code in order to find possible semantic errors
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but
if the program is massive it
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can&
#039; t
be delivered
by e-mail.
Also
, there is always a probability that an email would not deliver to the receptionist and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
it is
directly
delivered to the spam box. My personal experience is compelling evidence of what I mean. Last year when I was working on my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
e-mail to my advisor. It
was related
to one of the outputs of my simulation. My advisor did not reply to my e-mail and when I asked her about
Consider adding a comma here.
it
we realize that it was
wrongly
identified as
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
spam and
she did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
it.

In short,
Consider using "all the".
all of the
aforementioned reasons lead us to draw the conclusion that the best mean of communicating with other colleagues and classmates about a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
is talking about it in person by organizing a meeting. It is
mainly
due to the fact that e-mails are concise and do not contain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
.
Also
, there is always the possibility that e-mail would not
be delivered
to the receptionist
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 55: When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
439 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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