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tpo27 #3The woman expresses her opinion about the university’s plan. Briefly summarize the plan, then state her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

tpo27 #3The woman expresses her opinion about the university’s plan. Briefly summarize the plan, then state her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Nowadays, many suggest that only governments and large companies can help improve the environment and that individuals cannot do anything about it. In my opinion, individuals can also have an important role in enhancing their surroundings as they follow the rules and become mindful consumers. A good reason why individuals can make a difference in the environment is that it is they who follow the laws which the government gives. This means that without the law-abiding citizens, the implementation of such environmentally-friendly rules will not be possible. To give an illustration, the environmental act of 2005, a law in which people were obliged to segregate their wastes into compost wastes, landfill garbage, and recyclable, was a success as individuals from around the globe strictly followed this. As a result, lesser non-biodegradable wastes are produced, reducing it to a tolerable amount in the present, thus improving the cleanliness of the environment Another point is that individuals can help restore the beauty of the surroundings by buying things mindfully. Many of the consumers today are more aware and conscious of what they buy especially the materials being used. For instance, a lot of women at home today, shop the reusable food wrapper made out of beeswax instead of using plastic ones. This has helped to lower the volume of plastics in the community garbage bins and, in the long run, will help reduce the overall amount of it in the national landfills. In conclusion, individuals are still needed in the restoration of the environment, especially by abiding with the laws and through conscious consumerism.
Nowadays,
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many
suggest that
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only
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governments
and large
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companies
can
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help
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improve
the environment and that
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individuals
cannot do anything about it. In my opinion,
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individuals
can
also
have an
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important
role in enhancing their surroundings as they follow the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and become mindful consumers.

A
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good
reason why
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individuals
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a difference in the environment is that it is they who follow the laws which the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
gives. This means that without the law-abiding citizens, the implementation of such
environmentally
-friendly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
will not be possible. To give an illustration, the environmental act of 2005, a law in which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
were obliged
to segregate their wastes into compost wastes, landfill garbage, and recyclable, was a success as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
from around the globe
strictly
followed this.
As a result
, lesser non-biodegradable wastes
are produced
, reducing it to a tolerable amount in the present,
thus
improving the cleanliness of the
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environment


Another point is that
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individuals
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
restore the beauty of the surroundings by buying things
mindfully
.
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Many
of the consumers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
are more aware and conscious of what they
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buy
especially
the materials being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
.
For instance
,
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a lot of
women at home
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
, shop the reusable food wrapper made out of beeswax
instead
of using plastic ones. This has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
to lower the volume of plastics in the community garbage bins and, in the long run, will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the
overall
amount of it in the national landfills.

In conclusion
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
are
still
needed in the restoration of the environment,
especially
by abiding with the laws and through conscious consumerism.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay tpo27 #3The woman expresses her opinion about the university’s plan. Briefly summarize the plan, then state her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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