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TPO19 – Q3The man expresses his opinion about the university’s plan. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v.1

TPO19 – Q3The man expresses his opinion about the university’s plan. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Road accidents are a big concern for most of the countries. Some people believe that traffic accidents can be minimised by giving hard punishments. However, others favour that preventive measures should be taken to reduce the frequency of traffic accidents. This essay will cover both the aspects and give reasons why punishing the culprits will lead to better results. First of all, the mistakes made by people on the road which lead to the clash of vehicles should not be ignored and they should be penalised with heavy fines or imprisonment in case of serious offences. They will drive carefully once they get to know how much money they will have to pay for their single fault. Secondly, the punishment like cancellation of driving licence will make it difficult for them to commute. It will make them more vigilant while riding on the road. Taking preventive measures like making different lanes for heavy vehicles, two wheelers and cars will help reduce the traffic accidents. More careful measures should be taken on the roads which are around schools or other educational institutes. At the times when school starts or finishes, traffic using the road in front of schools should be re-routed. Also, the people should be made aware of accidental prone areas why putting signs on board or flyers. In conclusion, Although the imperative measures have been implemented by government to reduce the accidents, the number of deaths due to the road accidents is enormously high. The rules have already been made and implemented, but people do not follow them. They are always in a hurry and try to find the shortcut ways to reach the destination on time. They will be more disciplined if they are punished strictly.
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accidents
are a
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big
concern for most of the countries.
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Some
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people
believe that
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traffic
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accidents
can be
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minimised
by giving
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hard
punishments.
However
, others
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favour
that preventive
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measures
should
be taken
to
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reduce
the frequency of
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traffic
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accidents
. This essay will cover both the aspects and give reasons why punishing the culprits will lead to better results.

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First of all
, the mistakes made by
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people
on the
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road
which lead to the clash of vehicles should not be
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ignored and
they should be
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penalised
with heavy fines or imprisonment in case of serious
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offences
. They will drive
carefully
once they
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get
to know how much money they will
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have to
pay for their single fault.
Secondly
, the punishment like cancellation of driving
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licence
will
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make
it difficult for them to commute. It will
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make
them more vigilant while riding on the road.

Taking preventive
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measures
like making
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different
lanes for heavy vehicles,
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two wheelers
and cars will
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help
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reduce
the
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traffic
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accidents
. More careful
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measures
should
be taken
on the
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roads
which are around schools or other educational institutes. At the times when school
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starts
or finishes,
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traffic
using the
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road
in front of schools should be re-routed.
Also
, the
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people
should
be made
aware of accidental prone areas why putting signs on board or flyers.

In conclusion
, Although the imperative
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measures
have
been implemented
by
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government
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the
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accidents
, the number of deaths due to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
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accidents
is
enormously
high. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
have already
been made
and implemented,
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but
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people
do not follow them. They are always in a hurry and try to find the shortcut ways to reach the destination on time. They will be more disciplined if they
are punished
strictly
.
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IELTS essay TPO19 – Q3The man expresses his opinion about the university’s plan. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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