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TPO 40 - Question 3The woman expresses her opinion about the university’s plan. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

TPO 40 - Question 3The woman expresses her opinion about the university’s plan. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
It is true that some people are comfortably settled in their workspace and refuse to switch organisations. However, there are those who like to experience change. In this essay, I will discuss both of these behaviours and share my own views. There are certainly some benefits to sticking to the same job. To start with, people who stay loyal to a company are more likely to be promoted to higher positions. This is particularly true in sectors that value experience. Also, by working in the same company they can create a comfort zone around them. They are more likely to enjoy a good rapport with their colleagues and even seniors. This insulates them from many work related problems. In addition, loyalty is still valued by most organizations and people who choose to work in the same office are more likely to receive various perks and incentives. Better still, they are the last ones to lose their jobs in case of a recession. On the other hand, there are many more benefits to changing jobs whenever new opportunities present themselves. The biggest benefit is the opportunity to acquire diverse experiences. When a person starts a job, it is not always possible for them to predict whether they will enjoy it or not. If, after working at a company for one or two years, they discover that this is not the right job for them, it is always better to resign and find another job. Another advantage of changing jobs frequently is that it may enable a person to get a raise or a promotion more easily. For example, if they work in the same organization it may take a low level employee several years to get promoted to a mid or high level employee. This is because organizations tend to have a hierarchal system and it is not always possible to skip the steps of the ladder. When they change jobs, however, they may get to occupy a higher position as soon as they start. Of course, this is true only in the case of highly sought after professionals with unique skill sets. Sometimes changing jobs is the only way to get the raise or promotion a person deserves. Not every organization values talent and those who find themselves stuck at a place that does not do justice to them, quitting is the best option. To conclude, working at different places while gathering knowledge and experience is a more sensible and faster approach to reach a high position in your work-specialisation than working at the same place. This is because climbing the hierarchy at one particular place would take many-many years as it is difficult to replace the top position holders.
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some
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people
are
comfortably
settled in their workspace and refuse to switch
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organisations
.
However
, there are those
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who
like to
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experience
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change
. In this essay, I will discuss both of these
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behaviours
and share my
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own
views.

There are
certainly
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some
benefits to sticking to the same
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job
. To
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start
with,
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people
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who
stay loyal to a
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company
are more likely to
be promoted
to higher
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positions
. This is
particularly
true in sectors that value
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experience
.
Also
, by
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working
in the same
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company
they can create a comfort zone around them. They are more likely to enjoy a
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good
rapport with their colleagues and even seniors. This insulates them from
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many
work related problems.
In addition
, loyalty is
still
valued by most
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organizations
and
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people
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who
choose to work in the same office are more likely to receive various perks and incentives. Better
still
, they are the last ones to lose their
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jobs
in case of a recession.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
more benefits to changing
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jobs
whenever new opportunities present themselves. The biggest benefit is the opportunity to acquire diverse
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experiences
. When a person
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starts
a
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job
, it is not always possible for them to predict whether they will enjoy it or not. If, after
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working
at a
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company
for one or two years, they discover that this is not the right
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job
for them, it is always better to resign and find another
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job
. Another advantage of changing
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jobs
frequently
is that it may enable a person to
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get
a raise or a promotion more
easily
.
For example
, if they work in the same
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organization
it may take a low level employee several years to
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get
promoted to a mid or high level employee. This is
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because
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organizations
tend to have a
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hierarchal
system and it is not always possible to skip the steps of the ladder. When they
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change
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jobs
,
however
, they may
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get
to occupy a higher
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position
as
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soon
as they
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start
.
Of course
, this is true
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only
in the case of
highly
sought after professionals with unique
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skill
sets.
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Sometimes
changing
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jobs
is the
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only
way to
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get
the raise or promotion a person deserves. Not every
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organization
values talent and those
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who
find themselves stuck at a
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place
that does not do justice to them, quitting is the best option.

To conclude
,
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working
at
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different
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places
while gathering knowledge and
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experience
is a more sensible and faster approach to reach a high
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position
in your
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work-specialisation
than
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working
at the same
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place
. This is
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because
climbing the hierarchy at one particular
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place
would take
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many
-
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many
years as it is difficult to replace the top
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position
holders.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO 40 - Question 3The woman expresses her opinion about the university’s plan. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
450 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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