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The woman expresses her opinion about the university's plan. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

The woman expresses her opinion about the university's plan. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Some individual say that those who are migrating in others they have to accept a new culture of the host country, however others opine that they do not have to do so. This essay intends to analyse both prospectives. I agree with former view. On the one hand, some section of society believes that the person who migrate in other nation has to adopt their culture. To begin with, if they accept their practice, they learn new things and also compare with their tradition. To be more specific, they understand about their virtues and festivals. For instance, in India people follow the tradition of welcoming guests and respect elderly. Moreover, they can learn another language which is also good for their survival. On the other hand, another section of society supports that there is no need to understand another civilization. First and foremost, they tend to do that, they only follow a person from their own rustic and make small group. As a result, they become more isolated and reserved. Furthermore, some things like cuisine and clothes are not easily acceptable from different nations. For example, in Africa many Indian stay, but they are not adopting the foodstuff habits and clothes of them because most of Indian eats vegetarian cuisine. To Conclude, I believe that individuals should accept the tradition of a migrant country which is good for them to communicate and mix-up with them. However, certain things such as feed habits and clothes are not easily accepted.
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individual say that those who are migrating in others they
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have to
accept a new culture of the host country,
however
others opine that they do not
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have to
do
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so
. This essay intends to
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analyse
both
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prospectives
. I
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agree
with former view.

On the one hand,
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some
section of society believes that the person who migrate in
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other
nation
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has to
adopt their culture. To
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begin
with, if they accept their practice, they learn new things and
also
compare with their tradition. To be more specific, they understand about their virtues and festivals.
For instance
, in India
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people
follow the tradition of welcoming guests and respect elderly.
Moreover
, they can learn another language which is
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for their survival.

On the
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other
hand, another section of society supports that there is no need to understand another civilization.
First
and foremost, they tend to do that, they
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only
follow a person from their
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own
rustic and
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make
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small
group.
As a result
, they become more isolated and reserved.
Furthermore
,
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some
things like cuisine and clothes are not
easily
acceptable from
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different
nations.
For example
, in Africa
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many
Indian stay,
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but
they are not adopting the foodstuff habits and clothes of them
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because
most of Indian eats vegetarian cuisine.

To Conclude
, I believe that individuals should accept the tradition of a migrant country which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for them to communicate and mix-up with them.
However
, certain things such as feed habits and clothes are not
easily
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accepted
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The woman expresses her opinion about the university's plan. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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