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The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. v.1

The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. v. 1
In the modern work, the internet has its influences in all the fields. A group of people argued that the current technology can replace the country's historical exhibitions, as all the ancient objects can be viewed through the computer. I am not supporting this argument and the following essay state points to support my view. Firstly, the historical famous places such as museums and galleries are contributing a better part in the country's economy. In some places, these are the source for attracting the tourism. For example, in Mysore, the authority gets more than 5 lakh rupees in a year as part of exhibitions. This clearly shows, still the foreigners are interested in seeing the objects as part of their visit. Secondly, showing the ancient objects in the digital version may reduce the clarity and this impact the originality of the images. The image perfection depends on the medium we use to view it and the quality of the camera used for taking the picture. Moreover, uploading the photos also can reduce the perfection of the pictures. For instance, in Kerala, the government has started a website to display their cultural photos, but it could not receive a good feedback from the society as the originality was not there in the photos. In conclusion, in my opinion, a real visit to the galleries and museums gives more pleasure and digital versions of these may impact the realistic emotions of the pictures. By considering this s, it is better to start encouraging the art exhibitions in a countr
In the modern work, the internet has its influences in all the fields. A group of
people
argued that the
current
technology can replace the country's historical exhibitions, as all the ancient objects can
be viewed
through the computer. I am not supporting this argument and the following essay state points to support my view.

Firstly
, the historical
famous
places such as museums and galleries are contributing a better part in the country's economy. In
some
places, these are the source for attracting the tourism.
For example
, in Mysore, the authority
gets
more than 5 lakh rupees in a year as part of exhibitions. This
clearly
shows
,
still
the foreigners
are interested
in seeing the objects as part of their visit.

Secondly
, showing the ancient objects in the digital version may
reduce
the clarity and this impact the originality of the images. The image perfection depends on the medium we
use to
view it and the quality of the camera
used
for taking the picture.
Moreover
, uploading the photos
also
can
reduce
the perfection of the pictures.
For instance
, in Kerala, the
government
has
started
a website to display their cultural photos,
but
it could not receive a
good
feedback from the society as the originality was not there in the photos.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, a real visit to the galleries and museums gives more pleasure and digital versions of these may impact the realistic emotions of the pictures. By considering this

s, it is better to
start
encouraging the art exhibitions in a
countr
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
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