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The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the announcement. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the announcement. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
It is certainly not true that people only did leave the country to find a new life abroad, but they also moved from the countryside to the cities. They moved in search of a better life but, unfortunately for many, they found something worse than the conditions they had left behind. In my opinion, various measures can be taken by governments to improve city life for the average inhabitant. City life has several drawbacks. Firstly, although the big city has more job opportunities; there are usually more people competing for a single vacancy. By receiving a continuous rejection from employer one could suffer from continuous unemployment. Having trouble finding a job individual can be stressful. Secondly, the cost of living in cities is higher than in rural areas. For instance, apartments’ rent prices in the capital of New Zealand are two times higher than those in the countryside. Moreover, there are problems like traffic congestion and crime. To sum up, migrating people should understand that life in cities is not always easy. However, there are several methods can be implemented by governments to deal with the situation. The best way to improve city life is to stop or slow the migration process within the country. This can be done by improving small towns and the rural economy. For example, the creation of new job vacancies in the rural areas and/or lend to small farmers with low-interest rates may cause a boom in the economy. Besides, development in the educational infrastructure can attract the interest of the prospective students. In conclusion, governments should tackle the bad sides of living in cities by stabilizing overall living standards and economic conditions throughout the country.
It is
certainly
not true that
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people
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only
did
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leave
the country to find a new
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life
abroad,
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but
they
also
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moved
from the countryside to the
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cities
. They
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moved
in search of a better
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life
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but
, unfortunately for
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many
, they found something worse than the conditions they had
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left
behind. In my opinion, various measures can
be taken
by
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governments
to
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improve
city
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life
for the average inhabitant.

City
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life
has several drawbacks.
Firstly
, although the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
city has more job opportunities; there are
usually
more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
competing for a single vacancy. By receiving a continuous rejection from employer one could suffer from continuous unemployment. Having trouble finding a job individual can be stressful.
Secondly
, the cost of living in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
is higher than in rural areas.
For instance
, apartments’ rent prices in the capital of New Zealand are two times higher than those in the countryside.
Moreover
, there are problems like traffic congestion and crime. To sum up, migrating
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people
should understand that
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life
in
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cities
is not always easy.

However
, there are several methods can
be implemented
by
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governments
to deal with the situation. The best way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
city
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
is to
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stop
or slow the migration process within the country. This can
be done
by improving
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small
towns and the rural economy.
For example
, the creation of new job vacancies in the rural areas and/or lend to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
farmers with low-interest rates may cause a boom in the economy.
Besides
, development in the educational infrastructure can attract the interest of the prospective students.

In conclusion
,
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governments
should tackle the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
sides of living in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
by stabilizing
overall
living standards and economic conditions throughout the country.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the announcement. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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