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TPO25- prefer shopping for pleasure? Some people do not enjoy shopping and shop only when they have a specific purchase to make. Others like to go shopping for pleasure whether or not they have something to buy. Which do you prefer and why? v.1

TPO25- prefer shopping for pleasure? Some people do not enjoy shopping and shop only when they have a specific purchase to make. Others like to go shopping for pleasure whether or not they have something to buy. Which do you prefer and why? v. 1
In recent years, journalists have published more negative news than positive reports. However, there are many people argue that publishers should take efforts to report many motivating and inspiring stories than pessimistic ones. In my opinion, I consider including such articles would create a positive outlook about countries and motivate citizens to implement that points in their life. The primary reason for either broadcasting or publishing any information which has some benefits to the public is that this can project positive sides, for instance, about the government, business firms, and new projects. Eventually, the face of the country can be uplifted among other nations. Due to this, more and more tourists and investors would be attracted, which may bring an economical boost in a long run. By contrast, if reported more negative news, this would tarnish the nations’ name and fame unnecessary. Another point here is that, native people feel proud about their homeland since they have read more postive current affairs. This means patriotism can be developed, which is essential to strength relationship among citizens and reduce conflicts between people of different beliefs. They, gradually, learn how to tolerate and respect others. For instance, before pronouncing some sensitive verdicts the judicial system warns new agencies reporting judgements in a way which hurt others feeling. In conclusion, reporting more great articles is essential, according to some, and I strongly support this viewpoint since this brings many advantages to the country's financial status and integrity to the public. It is vital that news channels be assessed for publishing more positive reports
In recent years, journalists have published more
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negative
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news
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
positive
reports.
However
, there are
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
argue that publishers should take efforts to report
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
motivating and inspiring stories than pessimistic ones. In my opinion, I consider including such articles would create a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
positive
outlook about countries and motivate citizens to implement that points in their life.

The primary reason for either broadcasting or publishing any information which has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
benefits to the public is that this can project
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
positive
sides,
for instance
, about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, business firms, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
projects.
Eventually
, the face of the country can
be uplifted
among other nations. Due to this, more and more tourists and investors would
be attracted
, which may bring an economical boost in a long run. By contrast, if reported more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
, this would tarnish the nations’ name and fame unnecessary.

Another point here is that, native
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
feel proud about their homeland since they have read more
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postive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
affairs. This means patriotism can
be developed
, which is essential to strength relationship among citizens and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
conflicts between
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of
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different
beliefs. They,
gradually
, learn how to tolerate and respect others.
For instance
,
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before
pronouncing
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some
sensitive verdicts the judicial system warns
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
agencies reporting judgements in a way which hurt others feeling.

In conclusion
, reporting more great articles is essential, according to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
, and I
strongly
support this viewpoint since this brings
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advantages to the country's financial status and integrity to the public. It is vital that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
channels
be assessed
for publishing more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
positive
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
reports
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay TPO25- prefer shopping for pleasure? Some people do not enjoy shopping and shop only when they have a specific purchase to make. Others like to go shopping for pleasure whether or not they have something to buy. Which do you prefer and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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