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Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same TV Shows, advertisement, fashion and follow the same brand. To what extend the advantages of this trend outweighs disadvantages? v.1

Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same TV Shows, advertisement, fashion and follow the same brand. v. 1
The thought that the death penalty is beneficial for the nation is a moot point and several people stand by it. I partially agree with this view because, while it instills fear, nevertheless it would not stop mentally unstable serial killers. Firstly, death penalty given to a person who commits a heinous crime, is a strong deterrent to future acts of felony. Hence, psychologically, people would think more before committing such crimes. For example, according to news reports, the homicide rates in places without capital punishment are at least fifty percent higher than in states where it is enforced. Secondly, most citizens uphold the decision of the nation to implement the capital punishment, after conviction by the court of law, because they believe such criminals do not deserve anything lesser than that. The sinful act is so extreme at times, as in the case of India’s Nirbhaya rape accused, that the sanity of the convict is doubted On the other hand, a punishment of any extremity does not affect serial killers and psychopaths because violent offences are like challenges to them. These people even leave clues to solve, so that they can be found, which shows that they are not afraid of being caught. For instance, the infamous Zodiac killer in America, who left baffling clues for the media and the Cleveland torso murderer who beheaded and dismembered his victims, was never caught and are still lurking amongst us. To conclude, I partially agree that capital punishment is good for a country, as it controls crime in society to a large extent, although it does not intimidate a deranged offender whose ultimate dream may be to taunt and instigate fear.
The
thought
that the death penalty is beneficial for the nation is a moot point and several
people
stand by it. I
partially
agree
with this view
because
, while it instills fear,
nevertheless
it would not
stop
mentally unstable serial killers.

Firstly
, death penalty
given
to a person who commits a heinous crime, is a strong deterrent to future acts of felony.
Hence
,
psychologically
,
people
would
think
more
before
committing such crimes.
For example
, according to news reports, the homicide rates in places without capital
punishment
are at least fifty percent higher than in states where it
is enforced
.

Secondly
, most citizens uphold the decision of the nation to implement the capital
punishment
, after conviction by the court of law,
because
they believe such criminals do not deserve anything lesser than that. The sinful act is
so
extreme at times, as in the case of India’s
Nirbhaya
rape accused, that the sanity of the convict is
doubted


On the other hand
, a
punishment
of any extremity does not affect serial killers and psychopaths
because
violent
offences
are like challenges to them. These
people
even
leave
clues to solve,
so
that they can
be found
, which
shows
that they are not afraid of
being caught
.
For instance
, the infamous Zodiac killer in America, who
left
baffling clues for the media and the Cleveland torso murderer who beheaded and dismembered his victims, was never caught and are
still
lurking amongst us.

To conclude
, I
partially
agree
that capital
punishment
is
good
for a country, as it controls crime in society to a large extent, although it does not intimidate a deranged offender whose ultimate dream may be to taunt and instigate fear.
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IELTS essay Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same TV Shows, advertisement, fashion and follow the same brand. v. 1

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5 paragraphs
280 words
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