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TPO20 - Q3The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the article. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

TPO20 - Q3The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the article. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Many economists and other experts in relative fields argue about the nature of the continuously growing difference between economically-developed nations and other ones which do not have such a stable and the valuable economy base to call them rich. There are many issues to be solved before these countries will be called developed, but there are much more "receipts" to choose from to solve this a truly global problem. Joseph Stiglitz, a Noble prize winner economist, strongly insists that one of the best solution for this issue is to develop and implement a what he calls "global wealth tax". In his scientific publications, he supposed that both rich individuals and selected countries must pay a special fee if they have too much of financial resources in order to help poor nations, mainly in Africa and Latin America, to reduce the poverty and give them a chance to acquire enough instruments to build and maintain a strong infrastructure base for future economic activities (e. g. , power plants, universities, factories, airports, etc. ). On the other hand, other entitled economists continue to believe that such a tariff will not help to solve this issue. In their opinion, people and people and nations with substantial economic resources could try to avoid paying this duty by using, for instance, various schemes involving "tax havens". Moreover, it is also difficult to create and incorporate such a legislation in so many jurisdictions across the globe. These experts say that the main routes of the observed inequality between nations are the lack of human capital and political instability. So, they propose to help these countries by assisting them in building their educational systems and solving their internal political problems. In conclusion, it is obvious that there are a lot of the causes of the inequality between rich and poor countries simultaneously in the different aspects of their economic, political and social structures. There are several approaches how to solve these issues, Notwithstanding, all of them require a close and effective communication and collaboration between many members of the global community.
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economists and
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experts in relative fields argue about the nature of the
continuously
growing difference between
economically
-developed
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nations
and
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other
ones which do not have such a stable and the valuable economy base to call them rich. There are
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many
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issues
to
be solved
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before
these
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countries
will
be called
developed,
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but
there are much more
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receipts
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to choose from to solve this a
truly
global problem.

Joseph
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Stiglitz
, a
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Noble prize
winner economist,
strongly
insists that one of the best solution for this
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issue
is to develop and implement a what he calls
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"
global wealth tax
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"
. In his scientific publications, he supposed that both rich individuals and selected
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countries
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must
pay a special fee if they have too much of financial resources in order to
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help
poor
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nations
,
mainly
in Africa and Latin America, to
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reduce
the poverty and give them a chance to acquire
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enough
instruments to build and maintain a strong infrastructure base for future economic activities (
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,
power plants, universities, factories, airports, etc.
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)
.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
entitled economists continue to believe that such a tariff will not
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help
to solve this
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issue
. In their opinion,
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people
and
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people
and
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nations
with substantial economic resources could try to avoid paying this duty by using,
for instance
, various schemes involving
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"
tax havens
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"
.
Moreover
, it is
also
difficult to create and incorporate such a legislation in
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so
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many
jurisdictions across the globe. These experts say that the main routes of the observed inequality between
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nations
are the lack of human capital and political instability.
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So
, they propose to
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help
these
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countries
by assisting them in building their educational systems and solving their internal political problems.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that there are
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a lot of
the causes of the inequality between rich and poor
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countries
simultaneously
in the
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different
aspects of their economic, political and social structures. There are several approaches how to solve these
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issues
, Notwithstanding, all of them require a close and effective communication and collaboration between
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many
members of the global community.
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IELTS essay TPO20 - Q3The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the article. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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