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Task 2: Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Task 2: Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. v. 1
Some people may have the opinion that the rising cost of fuel is the accurate way to get rid of the problem about decreasing the number of cars and unpredictable pollution. From my point of view, I strongly agree with many sensible reasons, described in the following paragraph. Although, the petrol price is growing up, but people still have to transport to many places such as supermarket, school and their office. If they cannot afford the price of the fuel that growing up every day. They have to choose other ways to drive them to the place that they need to go. Public transportation is one of the choices that they will choose to transport them to their place. For example, go to their school by bus, boat, tube, etc. By using the public transportation will fall the amount of the pollution that normally from many cars on the road. We will get high quality and clean air back again. In addition, if the price of the petrol is expensive, the people will sufficiently use them. They will use the petrol when they have necessary thing to do, not just for their daily life. This makes petrol sustainable. Because we use it with our quality thinking. Therefore the companies that manufacture fuel doesn't have to use a lot of energy to produce the fuel to serve the need of human as ordinary. This will help decrease the amount of pollution that emit from many factories. It is undeniable that the factory is the main thing that make a lot of pollution. To conclude, I have an agreement with this statement. Raising the price of the fuel is the best solution for this problem. I recommend that the government and an organization about the petrol should do something with this problem that must effects our world.
Some
people
may have the opinion that the rising cost of
fuel
is the accurate way to
get
rid of the problem about decreasing the number of cars and unpredictable pollution. From my point of view, I
strongly
agree
with
many
sensible reasons,
described
in the following paragraph.

Although, the
petrol
price
is growing up,
but
people
still
have to
transport to
many
places such as supermarket, school and their office.
If
they cannot afford the
price
of the
fuel
that growing up every day. They
have to
choose other ways to drive them to the place that they need to go. Public transportation is one of the choices that they will choose to transport them to their place.
For example
, go to their school by bus, boat, tube, etc. By using the public transportation will fall the amount of the pollution that
normally
from
many
cars on the road. We will
get
high quality and clean air back again.

In addition
, if the
price
of the
petrol
is expensive, the
people
will
sufficiently
use
them. They will
use
the
petrol
when they have necessary thing to do, not
just
for their daily life. This
makes
petrol
sustainable.
Because
we
use
it with our quality thinking.
Therefore
the
companies
that manufacture
fuel
doesn't
have to
use
a lot of
energy to produce the
fuel
to serve the need of human as ordinary. This will
help
decrease the amount of pollution that emit from
many
factories. It is undeniable that the factory is the main thing that
make
a lot of
pollution.

To conclude
, I have an agreement with this statement. Raising the
price
of the
fuel
is the best solution for this problem. I recommend that the
government
and an organization about the
petrol
should do something with this problem that
must
effects our world.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Task 2: Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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