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TPO14- task2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways to learn is by making mistakes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v.1

TPO14- task2 One of the best ways to learn is by making mistakes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 1
According to some people, foreign visitors should pay more than locals to have access to cultural and tourist attractions in a country. In my opinion, I do not agree that foreign visitors ought to pay more, as they are a great economic benefit for both the attractions and the whole hosting country. A good economic reason to keep equal charge for foreign visitors is that they increase the wealth of these local cultural and tourist attractions. Making them more expensive, could discourage tourists from visiting those attractions and this would badly impact their financial sustainability. For example, everyone knows how expensive can be to keep an old monument and this cost can be afforded only with a high income coming from tourism. Another economic reason to keep the same charge for tourists is that they bring income for others local business such as transports, accommodation, restaurants. As a consequence, if the fee of attractions discourage them from visiting a country, this will affect other kind of business. A recent survey has shown, for example, that more than half of Italians, prefer to visit less important cities in their country, but where costs are much more affordable. In fact, it is very strategic, from an economic point of view, to keep low the charge of attractions because this will encourage more people to visit that country. In conclusion, it is a great advantage when foreign visitors are charged the same as locals. This can be very beneficial for the local economy in the short and long run.
According to
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some
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people
,
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foreign
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visitors
should pay more than
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locals
to have access to cultural and
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tourist
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attractions
in a country. In my opinion, I do not
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agree
that
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foreign
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visitors
ought to pay more, as they are a great
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economic
benefit for both the
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attractions
and the whole hosting country.

A
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good
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economic
reason to
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keep
equal charge for
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foreign
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visitors
is that they increase the wealth of these
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local
cultural and
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tourist
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attractions
. Making them more expensive, could discourage
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tourists
from visiting those
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attractions
and this would
badly
impact their financial sustainability.
For example
, everyone knows how expensive can be to
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keep
an
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old
monument and this cost can
be afforded
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only
with a high income coming from tourism.

Another
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economic
reason to
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keep
the same charge for
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tourists
is that they bring income for others
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
business such as transports, accommodation, restaurants. As a consequence, if the fee of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
attractions
discourage them from visiting a country, this will affect other kind of business. A recent survey has shown,
for example
, that more than half of Italians, prefer to visit less
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important
cities in their country,
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but
where costs are much more affordable. In fact, it is
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very
strategic, from an
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economic
point of view, to
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keep
low the charge of
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attractions
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because
this will encourage more
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people
to visit that country.

In conclusion
, it is a great advantage when
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foreign
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visitors
are charged
the same as
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locals
. This can be
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very
beneficial for the
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local
economy in the short and long run.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO14- task2 One of the best ways to learn is by making mistakes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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