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There are serious concerns about the sale and production of genetically modified food. Yet this is necessary if we are to meet the demands of an increasing world population. Give your opinions on this. v.1

There are serious concerns about the sale and production of genetically modified food. Yet this is necessary if we are to meet the demands of an increasing world population. Give your opinions on this. v. 1
Nowadays, University students are opting for subjects as per their interest and concentrate on it such as science and technology, mathematics and many more, which would be better for their future. While Others believe that Universities should teach subjects to their students, which is helpful for their career orientation. This essay will discuss both views with a reasoned conclusion. To begin with, the freedom of selecting subjects at university would make education more effective and would not force students to choose a particular course. For example, if an undergraduate fellow got scored highest marks in any subject and want to continue their career in the same field, but their parents are forcing them to select any other subject rather than his personal choice. In this condition, a student is getting more confusing during the selection. Moreover, if a student chooses the subject as per his interest so definitely he would perform extravaganza in their academics. Is choosing a subject as per any individual's interest play an important role in life or not? The answer is absolutely yes. On the other hand, people feel that the University should provide subjects which will be beneficial for any individual's career. Though technology-related subjects are quite important and Universities keep the focus on it broadly. For example, if a student performs good results in science while unable to score passing marks in mathematics so it is the responsibility of facilities along with parents to cope up and teach them that every subject is valuable and equally important for the future. In conclusion, the University should give more focus on quality education with an individual's interest. Everyone has their choose, however, take other subjects important for a bright future. According to me, all the subjects are valuable throughout life and give focus in all courses but don't neglect completely.
Nowadays,
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University
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students
are opting for
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subjects
as per their
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interest
and concentrate on it such as science and technology, mathematics and
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many
more, which would be better for their future. While Others believe that
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Universities
should teach
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subjects
to their
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students
, which is helpful for their career orientation.

This essay will discuss both views with a reasoned conclusion.

To
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begin
with, the freedom of selecting
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subjects
at
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university
would
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make
education more effective and would not force
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students
to choose a particular course.
For example
, if an undergraduate fellow
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got
scored
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highest
marks in any
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subject
and want to continue their career in the same field,
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but
their parents are forcing them to select any
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other
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subject
rather
than his personal choice. In this condition, a
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student
is getting more confusing during the selection.
Moreover
, if a
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student
chooses the
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subject
as per his
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interest
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so
definitely he would perform extravaganza in their academics. Is choosing a
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subject
as per any individual's
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interest
play an
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important
role in life or not? The answer is
absolutely
yes.

On the
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other
hand,
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people
feel that the
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University
should provide
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subjects
which will be beneficial for any individual's career. Though technology-related
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subjects
are quite
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important
and
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Universities
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keep
the focus on it
broadly
.
For example
, if a
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student
performs
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good
results in science while unable to score passing marks in mathematics
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so
it is the responsibility of facilities along with parents to cope up and teach them that every
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subject
is valuable and
equally
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important
for the future.

In conclusion
, the
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University
should give more focus on quality education with an individual's
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interest
. Everyone has their choose,
however
, take
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other
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subjects
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important
for a bright future.
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According to me
, all the
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subjects
are valuable throughout life and give
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focus in
all courses
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but
don't neglect completely.
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IELTS essay There are serious concerns about the sale and production of genetically modified food. Yet this is necessary if we are to meet the demands of an increasing world population. Give your opinions on this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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