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tpo11 task2 Some people think that children should be allowed to watch whatever television programs they choose to Others think that parents should exercise control over the television programs their children watch Which do you agree with Explain why v.1

tpo11 task2 Some people think that children should be allowed to watch whatever television programs they choose to Others think that parents should exercise control over the television programs their children watch Which do you agree with Explain why v. 1
In many countries, the demand for foreign food has become higher and higher in growth. Many people choose to buy imported food instead of domestic food. There are innumerable reasons for this phenomenon and steps could be set to grow for local food. There are several reasons why foreign food has evolved a great deal in many countries. One justification is that in the most recent years, there has been a rise in health consciousness among customers in choosing the ingredients for the daily meals and people often think that imported food seems more nutritious and better than domestic food. Another reason is that imported food is well selected before being exported to a nation. The authorities would not let shipping crates with low quality food to be imported to their nation. Thus, customers could feel safe and rely on this reason to choose imported food which they know clearly about its origin. However, the trend explained above would adversely affect people planting as well as selling domestic food and there are many measures that the government would do to help people in need. The first solution is that the state should make an attempt to restrict the amount of imported food. By this method, the demand for local food could positively thrive by the rarity of foreign food. Another measure is by using one of the redeeming qualities of domestic food is cheap, the authorities could make a sales campaign to help firms attempting to satisfy their customers’ demands. For example, Fahasa, the biggest bookstore in Vietnam, apply this method in their selling product strategy very well. They made numerous sales yearly, but they rarely discount for foreign product, and each time this campaign happened, the amount of Vietnamese books sold out was incredible. In conclusion, the fact that the demand for imported food has increased and the reduction of producing food locally is attributable to several factors. This can be handled by adopting the above mentioned suggestions.
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has become higher and higher in growth.
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instead
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. There are innumerable
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reasons
for this phenomenon and steps could
be set
to grow for local food.

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reasons
why
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foreign
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food
has evolved a great deal in
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many
countries. One justification is that in the most recent years, there has been a rise in health consciousness among customers in choosing the ingredients for the daily meals and
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people
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often
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think
that
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imported
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food
seems more nutritious and better than
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domestic
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food
. Another
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reason
is that
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imported
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food
is well selected
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before
being exported
to a nation. The authorities would not
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let
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to be
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imported
to their nation.
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reason
to choose
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imported
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food
which they know
clearly
about its origin.

However
, the trend
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explained
above would
adversely
affect
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planting
as well
as selling
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domestic
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food
and there are
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many
measures that the
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government
would do to
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help
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people
in need. The
first
solution is that the state should
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make
an attempt to restrict the amount of
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imported
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food
. By this method, the
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demand
for local
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food
could
positively
thrive by the rarity of
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foreign
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food
. Another measure is by using one of the redeeming qualities of
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domestic
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food
is
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cheap
, the authorities could
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make
a sales campaign to
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help
firms attempting to satisfy their customers’
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demands
.
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,
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Fahasa
, the biggest bookstore in Vietnam, apply this method in their selling product strategy
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very
well. They made numerous sales yearly,
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but
they rarely discount for
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foreign
product, and each time this campaign happened, the amount of Vietnamese books sold out was incredible.

In conclusion
, the fact that the
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demand
for
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imported
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food
has increased and the reduction of producing
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food
locally
is attributable to several factors. This can
be handled
by adopting the above mentioned suggestions.
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IELTS essay tpo11 task2 Some people think that children should be allowed to watch whatever television programs they choose to Others think that parents should exercise control over the television programs their children watch Which do you agree with Explain why v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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