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TPO (S4-Q2): Many universities now offer academic courses over the Internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? explain why. v.1

TPO (S4-Q2): Many universities now offer academic courses over the Internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? explain why. v. 1
In most of the developing nations work satisfaction considered as a luxury because, it is linked to the employee’s professional as well as the personal life. In my opinion, the job satisfaction is extremely important and if an employee is happy with his work, he will perform very efficiently and productively. The work ethics and daily practices are defined in most the companies by the human resource department. If these policies are really satisfying the employee’s expectations they will definitely love their job. In developing countries, an organization are providing facilities such as, healthy working environment, life and health insurances including their family, availing work from home, yearly increments and bonus’s etc. These all facilities are means a lot for an employee during his or her employment serving period. For example, according to a survey conducted in the Canada on happiness index relating to their work life, which exemplifies, 85% the people are happy with their employment and they believe it is all driven well as a treat due to standardization of the work practices. In addition to this, job satisfaction plays a vital role in an employee’s personal life too. The people who are really like what they are doing, they serve better, efficiently and more productively. The satisfied employee’s personal and professional life is stress free, and then they can enjoy their life fully. Such kinds of person’s have fewer complaints about their life, work and even family as –well. For example, in reference to a survey conducted by Unicef Inc. , in 2010 regarding an employment satisfaction and they were interviewed around 2000 people around the globe. They came to result that, the people who are satisfied with their work are happier as comparing to unsatisfied one, they have more time for their family and regularly they enjoy short picnic plans with their family and friends. To conclude, in my opinion, considering the job satisfaction as a luxury really worth it, when, it comes to happiness on the personal as well the professional level. At the end of the day job satisfaction really matter in everyone’s life.
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, he will perform
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ethics and daily practices
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companies
by the human resource department.
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If
these policies are
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really
satisfying the
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employee’s
expectations they will definitely
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job
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developing countries
, an organization are providing facilities such as, healthy working environment,
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family
, availing
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from home, yearly increments and bonus’s etc. These all facilities are means a lot for an
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employee
during
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his or her
employment serving period.
For example
, according to a survey conducted in the Canada on happiness index relating to their
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work
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life
, which exemplifies, 85% the
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people
are happy with their
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employment and
they believe it is all driven
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well
as a treat due to standardization of the
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work
practices.

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to this,
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satisfaction
plays a vital role in an
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employee’s
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personal
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life
too. The
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people
who are
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really
like what they are doing, they serve better,
efficiently
and more
productively
. The satisfied
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personal
and professional
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is
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fully
. Such kinds of person’s have fewer complaints about their
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,
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as
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.
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in 2010 regarding an employment
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satisfaction and
they
were interviewed
around 2000
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people
around the globe. They came to result that, the
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people
who
are satisfied
with their
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are happier
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as
comparing to unsatisfied one, they have more time for their
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and
regularly
they enjoy short picnic plans with their
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family
and friends.

To conclude
, in my opinion, considering the
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job
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satisfaction
as a luxury
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really
worth it, when, it
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comes
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personal
as
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the professional level. At the
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end
of the day
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job
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satisfaction
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really
matter in everyone’s
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IELTS essay TPO (S4-Q2): Many universities now offer academic courses over the Internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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