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Many universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? Explain why? v.1

Many universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? Explain why? v. 1
In the contemporary era, there have been lots of modifications and amendments made into laws and regulations in order to maintain the natural resources and environment. One such measure as enforced by law is the throw-away culture being recently adopted by people. This method has been adopted as a rudimentary necessity since more than 60% of the earth’s space can be seen completely occupied by litter and garbage consisting of especially plastic bags which do not decompose easily. I am strongly in favour of this opinion and believe that such stern methods are required to maintain the existing resources and environment. To embark upon, we usually see people using plastic bags instead of paper bags for the purpose keeping their durables or groceries etc. Nevertheless, these plastic bags are not easily decomposed and affects our oceans, especially aquatic species, resulting in extinction of natural habitat, its flora and fauna and ultimately having a vital influence on the overall environment cycle. Additionally, increase in plastic bags and litter is on account of a rise in population, which in turn results in increased pollution. One classic example is India, which is one of the most populated country. In India at-least 50% of the population are illiterate and work in factories as labour. These people throw all the rubbish extracted from commercial areas or factories into rivers and oceans and therefore impacts the water bodies. Apart from illiterate people, throwing of plastic bags is also widespread among educated people so as to remove the multifarious garbage accumulated around their houses. Despite so many repercussions and causes of use of plastic bags and rubbish since those are not fully disposed of, I adamantly believe that this threat can be tackled by mandating use of paper bags. This is imperative for the government and bureaucrats to create such laws and regulations which enhances the use of paper bags instead of plastic bags. Apart from government, pre-requisite steps should also be taken up the common layman by indulging themselves in campaigns for the protection of environment so as to generate public awareness about the disaster and the harmful impact of plastic bags on environment and consequently dearth of species including human beings. In fact, large businesses can also play a pivotal role in conservation of environment. As a part of Corporate Social responsibility, they should create employment amongst factory workers so that they remain cautious while disposing of the waste from factories and reduce the use of plastic bags which will surely protect the environment at a gigantic scale. In a nutshell, I strongly recount by saying that conservation of environment is the responsibility of all masses and not a single person or only law enforcement agencies. It is imperative that each person should treat the same as their common home and take every such measure which promotes awareness amongst the individuals, including the illiterate class so that they avoid use of plastic bags and throwing the same in oceans or lakes for their convenience.
In the contemporary era, there have been lots of modifications and amendments made into
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
and regulations in order to maintain the natural resources and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. One such measure as enforced by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
law
is the throw-away culture being recently adopted by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. This method has
been adopted
as a rudimentary necessity since more than 60% of the earth’s space can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
completely occupied by litter and garbage consisting of
especially
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
which do not decompose
easily
. I am
strongly
in
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favour
of this opinion and believe that such stern methods
are required
to maintain the existing resources and environment.

To embark upon, we
usually
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see
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people
using
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plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
instead
of paper
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bags
for the purpose keeping their durables or groceries etc.
Nevertheless
, these
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plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
are not
easily
decomposed and affects our oceans,
especially
aquatic species, resulting in extinction of natural habitat, its flora and fauna and
ultimately
having a vital influence on the
overall
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environment
cycle.
Additionally
, increase in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
and litter is on account of a rise in population, which in turn results in increased pollution. One classic example is India, which is one of the most populated country. In India at-least 50% of the population are illiterate and work in
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factories
as
Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.
labour
. These
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people
throw all the rubbish extracted from commercial areas or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
factories
into rivers and oceans and
therefore
impacts the water bodies. Apart from illiterate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, throwing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
is
also
widespread among educated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
remove the multifarious garbage accumulated around their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
.

Despite
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so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
repercussions and causes of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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plastic
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bags
and rubbish since those are not
fully
disposed of, I
adamantly
believe that this threat can
be tackled
by mandating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
. This is imperative for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and bureaucrats to create such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
and regulations which enhances the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
instead
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
. Apart from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
,
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pre-requisite
steps should
also
be taken
up the common layman by indulging themselves in campaigns for the protection of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
generate public awareness about the disaster and the harmful impact of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and
consequently
dearth of species including human beings. In fact, large businesses can
also
play a pivotal role in conservation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. As a part of Corporate Social responsibility, they should create employment
Do not mix variants of the same word ('amongst' and 'among') within a single text.
amongst
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factory
workers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they remain cautious while disposing of the waste from
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factories
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
which will
surely
protect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
at a gigantic scale.

In a nutshell, I
strongly
recount by saying that conservation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
is the responsibility of all masses and not a single person or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
law
enforcement agencies. It is imperative that each person should treat the same as their common home and take every such measure which promotes awareness
Do not mix variants of the same word ('amongst' and 'among') within a single text.
amongst
the individuals, including the illiterate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they avoid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
and throwing the same in oceans or lakes for their convenience.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Many universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? Explain why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
499 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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