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Task2: Many Universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which one do you think is better? Explain why? v.1

Task2: Many Universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which one do you think is better? Explain why? v. 1
When it comes to the issue of gender discrimination in the job sector, a significant number of inhabitants stand with different kinds of views. While a good number of individuals tend to take this issue as rosy, others seem to hold opposite trend. However, I am going to outline both sides of this issue prior to giving a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, a great number of merits come from this affair in many ways. The first and foremost point is that reservation in top level jobs for women can give confidence to work and study more to achieve that position. To cite an example, If women feel that specific job position is reserved, she will get motivated to do hard work to get that job. Another worth mentioning point is that women will be feel equality in the work field. To give an example, whenever women will be faced inequality in the workplace, she will get de-motivated and ignore to get that type of position. Last but not least, reservation may bring an authentic person who really deserves a high level position in job without falling in competition. However, it also seems to be more likely to come up with a couple of shortcomings. To begin with, reservation for only women can lead to create discrimination among men who deserve the top level job. For example, even though men have perfect results, women will get a job with less qualification because of reservation. Another most striking point is that this reservation system can create corruption. For instance, dishonest people or employers will hire their preferable candidates who can pay incentives. To sum up, having illustrated both sides of this affair, I would like to state my opinion that I strongly agree with this statement as it comes up with a good number of merits.
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of individuals tend to take this issue as rosy, others seem to hold opposite trend.
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top level
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women
can give confidence to work and study more to achieve that
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position
. To cite an example, If
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women
feel that specific
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job
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is reserved
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may bring an authentic person who
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without falling in competition.

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women
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men
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top level
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with less qualification
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system can create corruption.
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people
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If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Task2: Many Universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which one do you think is better? Explain why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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