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TPO 50 - Question 2Some people like having a wide variety of friends and acquaintances they can spend time with. Others like to spend most of their free time with the same small group of close friends. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

TPO 50 - Question 2Some people like having a wide variety of friends and acquaintances they can spend time with. Others like to spend most of their free time with the same small group of close friends. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
Education plays an important role in the development of a country. Some believe that it is the only crucial factor in the progress of a nation. I partially agree with it as there are other factors which are essential to consider which are responsible for the growth of a country Firstly, we must acknowledge the education system of our country as it is responsible for many things which are needed to be considered for the growth of the country. There are many concepts that depends on a person's education what he/she acquires. For instance, a person who gets theoretical and practical knowledge at the same will be more successful than the individual who just gets theoretical things. So, it will be beneficial for a country as it will lead it towards the development. Secondly, an educated person is necessary in every field whether it’s Medical, Industry, Politics and so on. A literate man can bring innovation and creativity at the workplace which ultimately brings progress in the home. On the contrary, there are other things which are essential for the overall development of a nation such as employment, medicine, finance and many more. Education is not the only factor which contributes maximum to the progress that is one of them for it. To conclude, education is pivotal for every country so that it can develop at high pace, but it is not the only one aspect which is required for a nation. I believe all the aspects are important for a country to grow in terms of the development.
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, we
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acknowledge the
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system of our
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as it is responsible for
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many
things which
are needed
to
be considered
for the growth of the
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country
. There are
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many
concepts that depends on a person's
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education
what he/she acquires.
For instance
, a person who
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gets
theoretical and practical knowledge at the same will be more successful than the individual who
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just
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gets
theoretical things.
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, it will be beneficial for a
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country
as it will lead it towards the development.

Secondly
, an educated person is necessary in every field whether it’s Medical, Industry, Politics and
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on. A literate
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man
can bring innovation and creativity at the workplace which
ultimately
brings progress in the home.

On the contrary
, there are other things which are essential for the
overall
development of a nation such as employment, medicine, finance and
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many
more.
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Education
is not the
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only
factor which contributes maximum to the progress
that is
one of them for it.

To conclude
,
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education
is pivotal for every
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country
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so
that it can develop at high pace,
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one aspect which
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for a nation. I believe all the aspects are
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important
for a
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to grow in terms of the development.
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IELTS essay TPO 50 - Question 2Some people like having a wide variety of friends and acquaintances they can spend time with. Others like to spend most of their free time with the same small group of close friends. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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