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Comfort Zone BiasPsychologists have found that when people make important decisions, they often choose to stay in their "comfort zones"; that is, they prefer remaining in comfortable, familiar situations, rather than entering into new, unfamiliar ones. Th v.1

Comfort Zone BiasPsychologists have found that when people make important decisions, they often choose to stay in their "comfort zones"; that is, they prefer remaining in comfortable, familiar situations, rather than entering into new, unfamiliar ones. Th v. 1
It is believed that unrevealed areas of the globe should be exposed for more resources to fulfil the need for oil and gas. This essay disagrees with the view that there isn't any necessity to open the unexposed area for Resources. Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact hat the importance of finding an alternative use of oil and gas and secondly, discuss the consequences of these resources. In present day, the demand of the oil and gas gradually rising that's why it's essential to use the areas of resource which are not searched yet. But it's really a great matter of concern that what will happen when those undiscovered resources will used? Therefore, it's necessary to find out an alternative component of the oil and gas. For instance, In New Zealand, they started solar energy as a substitute of electricity. However, the result of unleashing the area for resources will create a malign impact on the environment. Until now, for resources many trees were cut down, forests and jungle are turning into a desert, etc. As a result, greenhouse gas is gradually increasing, the rainfall is decreasing, many natural creatures are in the face of disappearance etc. If this continues, one day the earth will end up as a dust. For instance, while Australia is a developed country, they are facing many natural disasters Such as Tornado, Sidr and Flood etc. In conclusion, in the world of homogenization it's not impossible to find out an alternative way to keep our lives safe.
It
is believed
that unrevealed
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areas
of the globe should
be exposed
for more resources to fulfil the need for
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oil
and
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gas
. This essay disagrees with the view that there isn't any necessity to open the unexposed
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area
for Resources.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the fact hat the importance of finding an alternative
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use
of
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oil
and
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gas
and
secondly
, discuss the consequences of these resources.

In present day, the demand of the
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oil
and
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gas
gradually
rising that's why
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it's
essential to
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use
the
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areas
of
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resource
which are not searched
yet
.
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But
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it's
really
a great matter of concern that what will happen when those undiscovered resources will
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used
?
Therefore
,
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it's
necessary to find out an alternative component of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oil
and
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gas
.
For instance
, In New Zealand, they
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started
solar energy as a substitute of electricity.

However
, the result of unleashing the
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area
for resources will create a malign impact on the environment. Until
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now
, for resources
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many
trees were
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cut
down, forests and jungle are turning into a desert, etc.
As a result
, greenhouse
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gas
is
gradually
increasing, the rainfall is decreasing,
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many
natural creatures are in the face of disappearance etc. If this continues, one day the earth will
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end
up as a dust.
For instance
, while Australia is a
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developed country
, they are facing
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many
natural disasters Such as Tornado,
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Sidr
and Flood etc.

In conclusion
, in the world of homogenization
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it's
not impossible to find out an alternative way to
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keep
our
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lives
safe.
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IELTS essay Comfort Zone BiasPsychologists have found that when people make important decisions, they often choose to stay in their "comfort zones"; that is, they prefer remaining in comfortable, familiar situations, rather than entering into new, unfamiliar ones. Th v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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