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Some people like having a wide variety of friends and acquaintances they can spend time with. Others like to spend most of their free time with the same small group of close friends. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

Some people like having a wide variety of friends and acquaintances they can spend time with. Others like to spend most of their free time with the same small group of close friends. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
Everyone has their own Talen, some people say it is when they were born as sport or music, while others oppose this because they think that any child taught can become a good sports or music person. I personally agree with both views. On the one hand, people who think that capacity is available since they were born may be genetically right. For instance, a mother with a good voice, her child may have a good voice because they listen to her voice regularly and will remember that sound in their brain. Another example of this view is the famous composer Mozart, he has a father who is a composer. The two examples above show that genetic factors are possible and that they affect a child’s thinking, thus creating art. On the other hand, I also think power can be built and improved through environmental factors. Although we do not have the inherit element, we can go through books, practice to become a good sports person or a musician. For example, many people have to spend a lot of time and money to practice vocal. Therefore, the importance of environmental factors cannot have denied because if there is only a genetic without guidance then the savvy can be lost. In conclusion, everyone has their own talents, but human talents are not always available, but sometimes require external support to create it.
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that capacity is available since they
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, a mother with a
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good
voice, her child may have a
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voice
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because
they listen to her voice
regularly
and will remember that sound in their brain. Another example of this view is the
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composer Mozart, he has a father who is a composer. The two examples above
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that genetic factors are possible and that they affect a child’s thinking,
thus
creating art.

On the other hand
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also
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power can
be built
and
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through environmental factors. Although we do not have
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element, we can go through books, practice to become a
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sports person or a musician.
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time and money to practice vocal.
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, the importance of environmental factors cannot have denied
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if there is
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a genetic without guidance then the savvy can
be lost
.

In conclusion
, everyone has their
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talents,
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human talents are not always available,
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require external support to create it.
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IELTS essay Some people like having a wide variety of friends and acquaintances they can spend time with. Others like to spend most of their free time with the same small group of close friends. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
231 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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