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TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v.1

TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 1
Without a shadow of the doubt, having a good plan plays a vital role in our improvement. A good plan can bring us great success. Many people contend that because modern life is very complex having aability to plan is essential for people, while others assert it is not true. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that having the ability to plan and organize is critical for all people and especialaly young people. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point. The first and possibly the paramount reason is that if we have the ability to plan and organize we will use our time efficiently. So, by having a good plan and organizing our tasks and duties we can do our best. Also, it helps us to improve our skills and abilities. Furthermore, by working hard in schools and doing our homework and obtaining good grades in an organized way we can enter university. Entering universities is a so much promising step into a world of opportunities. Consequently, we can increase our knowledge in a field of specialty and the more we learn, the greater our chance to build a good society. As aresult, young people must have the ability yo plan and organize if they really want succeed. Another point springing to mind is that in the world of information by adventing a lot of new technologies and also by changing world quickly we can lose our goals. Sometimes these new technologies take most of our time and we can waste our precious time instead of concentration on our goals. In addition, by spending too much time in unnecessary things we cannot do our tasks. There is a possibility that it causes problem for us. For example, two years ago, I started to use Instagram application and I spend three hours in a day to watch differenet photos. As a result, I failed in my chemistry exam and I disappointed my parents. After that, I started to decrease the time I spended in this media and eventually I managed my time to do all my works including uploading my photo in my Instagram page, studying, and having fun with my friends. Having a plan not only assists us to have a convenient life but also creates us a good opportunity to broaden our horizen. To sum it all up, it is easy to see the advantages of having the ability to plan and organzie. We can use our time efficiently, we can increase our knowledge, enhance our abilities and also concentrate on our aims. I hope someday all the young people use their precious time to do wonderful actions for creating a better world.
Without a shadow of the doubt,
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having
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good
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plan
plays a vital role in our improvement. A
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good
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plan
can bring us great success.
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Many
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people
contend that
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because
modern life is
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very
complex
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having
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aability
to
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plan
is essential for
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people
, while others assert it is not true. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point.
However
, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to
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agree
that
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having
the
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ability
to
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plan
and organize is critical for all
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people
and
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especialaly
young
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people
. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.

The
first
and
possibly
the paramount reason is that if we have the
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ability
to
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plan
and organize we will
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use
our
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time
efficiently
.
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So
, by
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having
a
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good
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plan
and organizing our tasks and duties we can do our best.
Also
, it
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helps
us to
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improve
our
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skills
and
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abilities
.
Furthermore
, by working
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hard
in schools and doing our homework and obtaining
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good
grades
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in an organized way
we can enter university. Entering universities is a
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so
much promising step into a
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world
of opportunities.
Consequently
, we can increase our knowledge in a field of specialty and the more we learn, the greater our chance to build a
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good
society. As
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aresult
, young
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people
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must
have the
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ability
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yo
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plan
and organize if they
really
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want succeed
.

Another point springing to mind is that in the
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world
of information by
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adventing
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a lot of
new technologies and
also
by changing
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world
quickly
we can lose our goals.
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Sometimes
these new technologies take most of our
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
time and
we can waste our precious
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time
instead
of concentration on our goals.
In addition
, by spending too much
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time
in unnecessary things we cannot do our tasks. There is a possibility that it causes problem for us.
For example
, two years ago, I
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started
to
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use
Instagram application and I spend three hours in a day to
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watch
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differenet
photos.
As a result
, I failed in my chemistry exam and I disappointed my parents. After that, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to decrease the
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time
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "spent", the past tense form of the verb 'spend'?
I spended
in this media and
eventually
I managed my
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time
to do all my works including uploading my photo in my Instagram page, studying, and
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having
fun with my friends.
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Having
a
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plan
not
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only
assists us to have a convenient life
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but
also
creates us a
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good
opportunity to broaden our
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horizen
.

To sum it all up, it is easy to
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see
the advantages of
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having
the
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ability
to
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plan
and
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organzie
. We can
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use
our
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time
efficiently
, we can increase our knowledge, enhance our
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abilities
and
also
concentrate on our aims. I hope someday all the young
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people
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use
their precious
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time
to do wonderful actions for creating a better
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world
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
472 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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