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o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v.1

o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 1
Needless to say, every human being has his/her own manners of learning. Some people believe that learn something in a group is better because it is efficient, and others find, sometimes, nature of content matters most, therefore, learning as an individual is an appropriate process to gain knowledge. Studying in a batch of people is an efficient technique to learn something. This is because every single person has their own way of thinking, and they can discuss a single notion with multiple points of views, and at the end, they can come to a single effective solution. To illustrate, it is believed that a circle of three people can solve a problem more efficiently as compared to an individual person. In contrast, if the same work or problem solved by an individual, there are several chances, the solution will not be efficient, and his/her knowledge about that particular work will remain the same. However, sometimes, the nature of the content also matters. In these situations, people like to study alone because they do not want to discuss openly with other people. For example, content related to sex education, a study conducted by the University of London shows that 90% of people are shy in nature, and they do not find themselves comfortable to discuss and learn about sex education in groups. Ergo, it is better that, they should study that privately because it is an extremely important part of our life. In conclusion, although, group studies is a comprehensive strategy to gain knowledge, but, we should also take into account, the privacy of an individual. In my view, expanding someone's horizon much more important than the procedure of learning, and both the methods of learning is efficient according to different circumstances.
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people
believe that learn something in a group is better
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because
it is
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efficient
,
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and others
find,
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sometimes
, nature of content matters most,
therefore
,
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learning
as an
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individual
is an appropriate process to gain knowledge.

Studying in a batch of
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people
is an
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efficient
technique to learn something. This is
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because
every single person has their
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own
way of thinking, and they can discuss a single notion with multiple points of views, and at the
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end
, they can
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come
to a single effective solution. To illustrate, it
is believed
that a circle of three
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people
can solve a problem more
efficiently
as compared to an
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individual
person.
In contrast
, if the same work or problem solved by an
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individual
, there are several chances, the solution will not be
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efficient
, and his/her knowledge about that particular work will remain the same.

However
,
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sometimes
, the nature of the content
also
matters. In these situations,
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people
like to
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study
alone
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because
they do not want to discuss
openly
with other
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people
.
For example
, content related to sex education, a
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study
conducted by the University of London
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shows
that 90% of
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people
are shy in nature, and they do not find themselves comfortable to discuss and learn about sex education in groups. Ergo, it is better that, they should
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study
that
privately
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because
it is an
extremely
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important
part of our life.

In conclusion
, although, group
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studies
is a comprehensive strategy to gain knowledge,
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but
, we should
also
take into account, the privacy of an
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individual
. In my view, expanding someone's horizon much more
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important
than the procedure of
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learning
, and both the methods of
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learning
is
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efficient
according to
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different
circumstances.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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