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Tpo 44Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate v.1

Tpo 44Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate v. 1
There is no doubt nowadays, interaction of parents even those do not have a lot of time to spend with their children play the key role in children' s lives. No one can deny the effect of parents on children' s daily lives. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue that what is the best way to spend the time that parents be with their children. Some people hold this viewpoint which is better to parents use the time to have fun playing games or sport, however, some others make take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is better to use that time doing things related to schoolwork. From my own perspective, the second belief is true. In the following paragraphs I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons. First of all, one should take into account this significant fact that helping children with their homework will greatly improve their learning efficiency. Furthermore, it can help them learn new things in easier and also faster way. To illustrate the concept, take for example the child who has an assignment in math. When his parents help her to solve the problem, not only it is simpler for children but it also required less time. Needless to say by the time that is saved the child can go to museums and park another enjoyable place. In approaching this issue, apart from the fact mentioned above, one should regard another subtle point that spending time together to do things related to schoolworks will enhance affection in the family. As a matter of fact, this will reduce misunderstanding and also remove gaps between children and their parents. To demonstrate, researcher established and experimental program to estimate the impact of parents helping homework on children behavior' s toward their parents. The results are surprising: over 75 percent of the answer was positive. this clarifies the fact that how is beneficial if parents help their children do their homework. undoubtly, playing video game with children' s' s have some potential benefit. it can help them have a positive attitude to life, consequently, they have less stress in their lives. actually there are some other reasons and examples, supporting this claim, which are not mentioned above, All in all assistance of parents with children schoolwork, not only help them learn things better and more efficient way but also get family bond tighter. in other words, it is really essential that parents help their children with their homework.
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parents
even those do not have
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a lot of
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time
to spend with their
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children
play the key role in
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. No one can deny the effect of
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parents
on
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children&
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lives
. A controversial question which is
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often
raised regarding this issue that what is the best way to spend the
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time
that
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parents
be with their
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children
.
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people
hold this viewpoint which is better to
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parents
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use
the
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time
to have fun playing games or sport,
however
,
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some
others
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make
take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is better to
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use
that
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time
doing things related to schoolwork. From my
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own
perspective, the second belief is true. In the following paragraphs I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.

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First of all
, one should take into account this significant
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fact
that helping
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children
with their homework will
greatly
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improve
their learning efficiency.
Furthermore
, it can
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help
them learn new things in easier and
also
faster way. To illustrate the concept, take
for example
the child who has an assignment in math. When his
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parents
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help
her to solve the problem, not
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only
it is simpler for
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children
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but
it
also
required less
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time
. Needless to say by the
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time
that
is saved
the child can go to museums and park another enjoyable place.

In approaching this issue, apart from the
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fact
mentioned above, one should regard another subtle point that spending
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time
together to do things related to
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schoolworks
will enhance affection in the family. As a matter of
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fact
, this will
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reduce
misunderstanding and
also
remove gaps between
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children
and their
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parents
. To demonstrate, researcher established and experimental program to estimate the impact of
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parents
helping homework on
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children
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behavior&
#039; s toward their
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parents
. The results are surprising: over 75 percent of the answer was
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positive
.
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this
clarifies the
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fact
that how is beneficial if
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parents
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help
their
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children
do their homework.

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undoubtly
, playing video game with
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some
potential benefit.
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can
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help
them have a
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positive
attitude to life,
consequently
, they have less
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stress
in their
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lives
.

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actually
there are
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some
other reasons and examples, supporting this claim, which are not mentioned above, All in all assistance of
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parents
with
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children
schoolwork, not
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only
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help
them learn things better and more efficient way
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but
also
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get
family bond tighter.
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in
other words, it is
really
essential that
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parents
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help
their
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children
with their homework.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Tpo 44Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
413 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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