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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It s a waste of money for Government to fund space travel or space exploration Give specific examples and details to support your answer v.2

It s a waste of money for Government to fund space travel or space exploration Give specific examples and details to support your answer v. 2
By developing technology these days, the majority of countries save and spend their budget for space exploration and cyber traveling which is not necessary for these decades. Because of a large number of factors as environmental, industrial, and educational issues. This essay attends to examine these reasons. In the first step, it is very significant to consider about an environmental issue that is vital for humanity. In the way of explanation, global warming has been a hot topic around the world. For example, the community of counties established an annual program for investing money to solve problems. In particular, air pollution in the world exerts a negative impact on the atmosphere. However, traffic jams and noise of construction in urban is essential for a resident. The main point for addressing all of these issues can be solved by consisting. All in all, one of the factors which are essential instead of exploration in space is a problem that stems from environmental issues. In the second step, in the emerging countries, the educational system should be improved by the government which needs a considerable amount of money. Children and parents in these countries because of the shortage of money and excellent educational systems cannot study as well as developing countries. Specifically, in the African countries lack of good schools and universities is in these categories. However, in the North American continent investing money in the context of the educational system is very common. In general, it should never be ignored by educational system problems. Finally, in third world nations, the lack of advances in industrialization has a terrible impact on manufacturing and human resources. For instance, in the middle east, car factories never are developed by the government because of the lack of money and the annual budget. Notably, more money has been considered for military tools. Nonetheless, investing in money for goods can be beneficial for economic factors. To sum up, a shortage of money in the industrial may posh people to intend to immigrate to the developing countries. In conclusion, even it is essential to consider space exploration. Although some factors like global warming, educational systems and supporting industries need to be improved and considered by the government and all budgets have to spend on solving these setbacks.
By developing technology these days, the majority of
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save and spend their budget for space exploration and cyber traveling which is not necessary for these decades.
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Because
of
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a large number of
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factors
as environmental, industrial, and
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educational
issues. This essay attends to examine these reasons.

In the
first
step, it is
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very
significant to
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consider about an
environmental issue
that is
vital for humanity. In the way of explanation, global warming has been a hot topic around the world.
For example
, the community of counties established an annual program for investing
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money
to solve problems.
In particular
, air pollution in the world exerts a
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negative
impact on the atmosphere.
However
, traffic jams and noise of construction in urban is essential for a resident. The main point for addressing all of these issues can
be solved
by consisting. All in all, one of the
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factors
which are essential
instead
of exploration in space is a problem that stems from environmental issues.

In the second step, in the emerging
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countries
, the
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educational
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system
should be
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improved
by the
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government
which needs a considerable amount of
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money
. Children and parents in these
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countries
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because
of the shortage of
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money
and excellent
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educational
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systems
cannot study
as well
as developing
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countries
.
Specifically
, in the African
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countries
lack of
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good
schools and universities is in these categories.
However
, in the North American continent investing
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money
in the context of the
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educational
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system
is
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very
common.
In general
, it should never be
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ignored
by
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educational
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system
problems.

Finally
, in third world nations, the lack of advances in industrialization has a terrible impact on manufacturing and human resources.
For instance
, in the
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middle east
, car factories never
are developed
by the
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government
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because
of the lack of
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money
and the annual budget.
Notably
, more
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money
has
been considered
for military tools. Nonetheless, investing in
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money
for
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goods
can be beneficial for economic
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factors
. To sum up, a shortage of
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money
in the industrial may posh
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people
to intend to immigrate to the
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developing countries
.

In conclusion
, even it is essential to consider space exploration. Although
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some
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factors
like global warming,
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educational
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systems
and supporting industries need to be
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improved
and considered by the
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government
and all budgets
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have to
spend on solving these setbacks.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It s a waste of money for Government to fund space travel or space exploration Give specific examples and details to support your answer v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
379 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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