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TPO 43 - Question 5The speakers discuss two possible solutions to their problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v.1

TPO 43 - Question 5The speakers discuss two possible solutions to their problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 1
Apart from government, people of influence in the society give opinions on several issues in the public sector, which can either affect the community positively or negatively. Several thoughts have it that popular persons give their suggestions on things that make the news and this could either go right or wrong. This essay will support that it is good for such people have their say when it matters. Firstly, people who are popular are well respected in their community and country at large, and even some are all over the world and their take on an issue that concerns others really matters. When they give opinions, everyone is usually affected either positively or negatively. For example, If Warren Buffet, a wealthy investor decides to withdraw his support or stake in a particular company, most likely the company may fold up. This shows the level of authority he has over companies and how his decision can affect several others. Secondly, political leaders who are either elected into power or are the oppositions. The level of their take on public decisions can not be underestimated. They have several followers who can influence their own community to follow the instruction of their political leader. For example, such leaders can sway their followers to lead a riot against the government and these ones would take up arms, begin to protest against a decision made by the authorities and in the process damage properties. In conclusion, persons in the society who can influence the happenings in their locality should be seen as a good leader who can help the authorities to make better decisions and not one whose decision can affect the entire society for bad.
Apart from
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government
,
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people
of influence in the society give opinions on several issues in the public sector, which can either affect the community
positively
or
negatively
. Several thoughts have it that popular persons give their suggestions on things that
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make
the news and this could either go right or
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wrong
. This essay will support that it is
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good
for such
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people
have their say when it matters.

Firstly
,
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people
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who
are popular are well respected in their community and country at large, and even
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some
are all over the world and their take on an issue that concerns others
really
matters. When they give opinions, everyone is
usually
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affected
either
positively
or
negatively
.
For example
, If Warren Buffet, a wealthy investor decides to withdraw his support or stake in a particular
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company
, most likely the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
may fold up. This
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shows
the level of authority he has over
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companies
and how his
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decision
can affect several others.

Secondly
, political
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leaders
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who
are either elected into power or are the oppositions. The level of their take on public
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decisions
can not
be underestimated
. They have several followers
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who
can influence their
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own
community to follow the instruction of their political
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leader
.
For example
, such
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leaders
can sway their followers to lead a riot against the
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government
and
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these ones
would take up arms,
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begin
to protest against a
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decision
made by the authorities and in the process damage properties.

In conclusion
, persons in the society
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who
can influence the happenings in their locality should be
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seen
as a
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good
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leader
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who
can
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help
the authorities to
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make
better
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decisions
and not one whose
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decision
can affect the entire society for
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bad
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 43 - Question 5The speakers discuss two possible solutions to their problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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