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The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and why. v.3

The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and why. v. 3
Despite, the importance of the sculpture corridors in a country. The quantity of individuals visiting the sculpture corridors is frequently decreasing in some nations. This essay will examine the reasons and possible solutions of this problem. Art galleries entrance ticket is one of the major reasons for decreasing the humans visit to these galleries. Moreover, lack of advertisement for new events in sculpture corridors and frequent updating requirements of galleries are the causes which stops the interest of individuals for visiting the sculpture corridors. The art galleries should under the government and should be supported by the government of the country. The entrance in the art galleries should free which attracts more humans to visit and share the cultural information with natives and foreigners. The promoters of the art gallery events should take necessary initiatives in the advertising of the new events, which help to attract the new visitors to art galleries. One of reason of attraction of visitors, if these art galleries are updated regularly. For example, in 2010 in Qatar Islamic art gallery, 98 percent of the total population had visited the gallery but this numerical figure decreases with the passage of time and only 50% of the population had visited the sculpture corridor last year. Regular changes in the art galleries content play a vital role in the attraction of new visitors. To conclude, lack of promotions of new events in art galleries, entrance tickets and lack of updating are the causes of deteriorating the human’s visits in art galleries in some nations. In fact, proper advertisement of new events in galleries, free entrance and continuous changes in the art galleries are the reasons for the attraction of new visitors.
Despite, the importance of the
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sculpture
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corridors
in a country. The quantity of individuals visiting the
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sculpture
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corridors
is
frequently
decreasing in
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some
nations. This essay will examine the
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reasons
and possible solutions of this problem.

Art
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galleries
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entrance
ticket is one of the major
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reasons
for decreasing the humans visit to these
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galleries
.
Moreover
, lack of advertisement for
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new
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events
in
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sculpture
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corridors
and frequent updating requirements of
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galleries
are the causes which
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stops
the interest of individuals for visiting the
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sculpture
corridors.

The
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art
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galleries
should under the
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government
and should
be supported
by the
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government
of the country. The
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entrance
in the
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art
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galleries
should free which attracts more humans to visit and share the cultural information with natives and foreigners.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
promoters of the
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art
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gallery
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events
should take necessary initiatives in the advertising of the
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new
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events
, which
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help
to attract the
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new
visitors to
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art
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galleries
. One of
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reason
of attraction of visitors, if these
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art
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galleries
are updated
regularly
.
For example
, in 2010 in Qatar Islamic
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art
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gallery
, 98 percent of the total population had visited the
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gallery
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but
this numerical figure decreases with the passage of time and
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only
50% of the population had visited the
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sculpture
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corridor
last year. Regular
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changes
in the
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art
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galleries
content play a vital role in the attraction of
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new
visitors.

To conclude
, lack of promotions of
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new
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events
in
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art
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galleries
,
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entrance
tickets and lack of updating are the causes of deteriorating the
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human’s visits
in
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art
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galleries
in
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some
nations. In fact, proper
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advertisement of
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new
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events
in
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galleries
, free
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entrance
and continuous
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changes
in the
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art
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galleries
are the
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reasons
for the attraction of
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new
visitors.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman's problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which solution you prefer and why. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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